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A Big Fat Lie

I’m sorry!
I regret the past.
winked his eye.

betrayalsenryu

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Jan Allison

October 28, 2015 at 2:33 PM

The eyes say so much - very clever indeed ...I would class it as a senryu:-) hugs jan xx

Rahy Hy

October 28, 2015 at 2:48 PM

Done! thanks for reading my poem :) hugs xx

Jan Allison

October 28, 2015 at 2:45 PM

If you look at the example for senryu on soup that doesn't follow the traditional 5 7 5 syllables count - I guess it could be classed as a 'modern senryu' like haiku are nowadays :-( hugs jan xx

Rahy Hy

October 28, 2015 at 2:38 PM

Thanks Jan for your comment. Syllable won't work for a senryu, would it?!

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