David William Breidenthal Poet Senryu

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Zero comments again
I stay up late just to see
If someone read verse

Tunes sink through my head
Zero for eternity
Can't help but feel dread

Zero, that number
Is shameful - who's fault is that?
Not yours, mine of course

Zero in on me
Felt zero satisfaction 
Make me joyous please

Hey! Brighten my night
Fireworks burst when I close eyes
I'm 18, no zero!!! 

Almost on cloud se-
Venture into my mind's eye
Don't understand it...

I have zero views 
My world is moving on fast 
And I'm lone boy

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Ravi Sathasivam June 25, 2018 at 3:07 AM Excellent. Interesting subject. Done well. Thanks for sharing it. David William Breidenthal June 25, 2018 at 5:41 AM Thank you! I enjoy, reading your comments on my poetry. You're welcome ^-^ -JWE

Kim Van Breda October 5, 2015 at 3:43 PM Great write J... the sum of zero... interesting choice of theme, but you had a lot to say on the topic. Will definitely be "Zero-ing" in on your work ;) ~~X~~