The Weight of Words

Read your poem out loud. Don’t be fraud to edit. Watch out for spelling (look words up). First 4 lines are good. “Bread” should be “breed,” but that sentence felt clumsy as did the following with “leave em misled.” Use a rhyming dictionary and play with what you want to say (at least as you edit). Final four is good. Hope this helps. Just an imperfect poet helping another. Hugs

This is truly beautiful. i would add on some similies or metaphors to strenthen your point