Feedback Request (Black August)

I have a hip-hop infused/avant garde piece that I'm planning to put in an upcoming collection entitled "Black Narcissus & Child." The collection will explore the themes of identity, ancestry, pride, love and the darker side of romance. I'm not used to receiving critiques but I am interested to know what people might think of this.

The link to the poem is below:

https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/black_august_1753921