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4/30/2012 1:08:30 PM
Hello I'm Josie and a new member. I'm from Yorkshire, England and I'm pleased to meet you all.
4/30/2012 1:31:08 PM
First one I am not sure if you are trying to write with rhyme, but I see you have chosen many words that rhyme. In English poetry, rhyming poetry is often accompanied by four iambic feet, ie ti TUM ti TUM ti TUM ti TUM - and the last heavy beat would rhyme with the last heavy beat on the following line.



eg: As leaves were falling all around

And gently reached the frosty ground.




Then you would have another two lines which rhyme, eg:




The wicked wind whipped through the breeze

And blew still more leaves from the trees.




eg: As LEAVES were FALLing ALL aROUND

And GENTly REACHED the FROSTy GROUND




I write lots of poetry in this way, and if you Google JOSIE'S POEMS you will see some of them. I've also written many articles on this. If you Google Iambic feet, it will teach you about this.




Also popular in English poetry is 7 iambic feet, but usually poets break them up into four on one line and three on the second, with the rhyming word, and then 4 on the third line and 3 on the 4th line with the rhyming word. Go and see the poem I've just posted called New Dawn. This is exactly in this style. It is very popular in English poetry. I think you are trying very hard and I could not imagine how hard it would be for me to do a rhyming poem in another language. Well done!!!! Come and say hello in my guestbook on my website Neutrino. Are you Italian? It is Italian that I've learnt but I'd hate to write a poem in it. You are amazing!
5/2/2012 1:56:13 PM
Writing for Children May I suggest that if you haven't already tried it, write for children - but not just silly little rhymes. Children love wonderful new words, and images in their work. I write for children and you'd be surprised that children tell me that poems which I thought were more for adults, they love, and sometimes adults tell me they like the children's poems. Learn to write for every age group. It's hard. The educational neuroscientists are telling us that they want more rhyming and rhythmic poems back in the classroom. It helps children to develop phonological awareness, a key literacy skill. It really pays to learn about metre in its different forms, ie iambic metre/trochaic metre, and the lovely poems written with anapaests. Di di DUm di di DUM. They flow along so well and are quite easy to write. There is a great market out there for children's poems. It is not an optional subject in school classrooms in English speaking countries. Hope this advice is good.
5/5/2012 12:48:26 PM
Never been critiqued before If I tell you the truth Major H, I would say that your rhyming is good but your metre is faulty. I can see anapaests coming and going in your poem, ie ti TI TI ti TI TI (four per line). This would make the basic rhythm anapaestic tetrameter (4 per line). Look: I ig NORED my gut FEEL ing my GREAT est reGRET. You can see these four clearly. This is a lovely lovely easy flowing metre for poetry and I use it a lot, but you need to count it out line by line and it takes time I know. I hope this helps you. The opposite of this is the Dactyl and this is the waltz of the poetry world, ie TUM ti ti TUM ti ti TUM ti ti TUM ti ti. I also like this but the anapaests are much easier to get right. I guess it's hard until you do lots of them. Good luck. It is a really really sad poem and I hope it doesn't apply to you. Best wishes
5/7/2012 3:17:58 PM
JOSIE'S POEMS I made a website three and a half years ago at the request of the children in my local primary school for whom I wrote a weekly poem. I'd love you to see it, although I'm afraid you can't see all the poems as I have a membership area. I've written somewhere between 850-900 poems and am getting them illustrated with children's artists. Last year the poems went into 188 countries of the world and I am just glad that the children love the poems. I sometimes get asked to do skype visits to their classroom. You cannot believe how nice it is to meet children who are really enjoying the poems you write - and on the other side of the world too. I often write a special poem for the occasion. The last poem was a funny one called "My Warm Woolly Knickers". Here in England, the children would have been giggling just at the title but the children in Wisconsin didn't even smile. I was puzzled until their teacher said they didn't know what "knickers" meant, ha ha. It had never crossed my mind that though we both speak English some words they don't know. Do come and say hello in my guestbook. I love visitors. Thank you so much. Just Google JOSIE'S POEMS.
5/11/2012 2:58:39 PM
Need help with my poetry style My advice is probably contrary to everyone else's but I would say that you learn to write poetry in much the same way as you learn to play music. Don't just lift the lid of the piano and thump away. Take the trouble to learn how rhythm is made, and the difference between a waltz and a march, but in poetry it is a dactyl (the waltz) and iambic feet, (the march). It is worth learning about the structure of poetry and also to have good rhythm. It also helps if you can break words down into sounds easily, especially if you write with rhythm. I think that metre in a poem turns it from something that can be dreary into a poetic dance on paper, ha ha. This is probably different advice to everyone else's but it works well for me.
5/13/2012 7:39:45 AM
Trying to Publish, but can't find a Publisher :( Children's poetry isn't selling in shops. It goes mainly into classrooms. The reason I was told by the head buyer of Waterstones, London is that children don't like the free-verse that is being written today. They like poems written with rhyme, rhythm and lots of stories. Market research your poetry on children of all ages, and a local school is a good starting place. I will give you further advice when you've done this and come back with results. It is a long haul. I give my advice as a well published children's poet.
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