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4/24/2012 10:50:21 PM
||Hi guys. This is my first try at poem writing. I would appreciate as much critique and tips as possible. Also please note that English is not my native language so comments on grammar would be highly appreciated. Thanks!
As leaves were falling all around
And the gentle spirits of the fall awoke
I fell softly to the autumn ground,
As I lost my pretty Hope.
Alas Hope was really not her name,
But charming were those eyes of her.
Adventures brought me to her game,
Yet dreadful sins destroyed our flame.
But the leafy ground feels sweet,
As only silent heart-beat I can hear
And the velvet sky is all I see,
Only dreamy heights await me there.
4/26/2012 3:08:58 PM
||Thanks a lot! I will surely fix these mistakes.
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