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5/24/2011 5:00:04 PM
critique anyone?? (please critique on all 3 poems)
||I am Earth..
I am the root of life’s endurance.
From the emergence of one’s breath
To death’s uninvited entrance
I am the cradle of everyone’s wealth.
Though I provide for almost everything,
Fresh air, crops, fruits and shelter
Nobody hears my call of healing
I need to be replenished now or never
I dutifully provide all that people need
But instead of delight and contentment,
I see more cravings and unending greed.
Thus ensuing my melancholy and resentment
Hear me cry, hear me weep
I am being consumed far more than I could give
Soon my deterioration will kill us all
So start acting now before such catastrophe befalls
It is I, Mother Earth, in my depths of despair,
Ask you, my benefactors to give me more care
For it is I who keeps your race surviving
So you may, in ages, continue on living.
"the search is on",
i whisper and smile,
for sadness has already gone,
i have grown an extra mile..
months passed and i found one,
And our future as bright as the sun.
As i turn to gold from copper,
i tell myself, "the search is over.."
enter the world or Fantasy..
JUST DREAM WITH ME...
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