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4/4/2012 12:42:38 AM

dillon lewis
Posts: 1
hear the voices calling
whistling through the trees
they say aloud
to the gathering crowd
take to the open sea
the voices are growing louder
we must be getting close
their shrieks and cheers
put a ring in my ears
its time to silence these ghosts
the voices are deadly silent
never to be heard again
i took to the sea
they spoke unto me
needing no more then a friend
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4/4/2012 7:09:27 AM

Kara McLain
Posts: 7
I love the feel and flow. It has a very mystical feel. Though the lack of punctuation gives it an almost desperate feeling.
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4/16/2012 2:33:26 PM

Poet Destroyer A
Posts: 3
Hammer Time hummmmmake it a bit more intresting... you were headed the right direction... with the imagination of the gathering crowd... keep up the good work... always...pd

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