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2/14/2011 3:43:30 PM

Not Me
Posts: 4
I sit back and stare
at this world who may not care
about my times of despare
i look and just glare
at what would and should be there
my v day is in repair
countless years of not being able to bare
i write these little poems just to fair
what most take for granted... i declare
todays a day of love and flare
of the ones you cherish and share
the people who mean the most and dare
to have great love and will always be there
some of us realize that they won't always be there
mind sets change and people ware
to look into the past if you dare
to get over all your pain that u bare
would make life a place that you wouldn't compare
happiness with the one you share
that one with smiles and doesn't judge that you scare
for me to look past everything and just spare
the pain i've felt in a time there was too much care
to be stepped upone like i was not there
someday i hope i'll be able to spare
these feelings like no one is there
so v day is a day of becoming aware
of all the pain i've felt and in all i still compare
not what should be done, but i still tear
those pieces from this book, and know i still compare
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3/21/2011 9:08:04 AM

Aron Jacob
Posts: 12
There are a number of spelling errors that perhaps you would want to correct in this work.
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