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7/19/2010 11:27:15 AM

Virginia Mitchell
Posts: 2
An allotted announcement;
Ben’s brother balances
Carefully, carrying containers
Designated “Dogma Delivery.”
Eventually, everyone
Finds frog-gy feelings for
Generously generated
Hair-raising hijinks.
Incoherent ideas incur.
Jeremiah jumps, jolting,
Kicking kleptomaniacs,
Lashing lawlessness.
Money monkeys make
Notorious nincompoops.
Obscure obligations often
Poisons pathetic passion!
Quarantining qualified
Representatives,
Shrivels support,
Transforming truth-
Unilaterally, unfairly
Vexing vicariously.
While we want
Xanadu,
Yokels yield
Zion’s zenith
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11/29/2010 5:44:01 AM

Sebastian Valmont
Posts: 2
I must say, that's a very clever alliterative abecedarian poem! Great use of imagery that flows from beginning to end, with an interesting theme that avoids sounding like nonsense. Which is difficult for abecedarian poems to not do. Impressive.
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11/30/2010 10:01:57 AM

James Tate
Posts: 4
imrosie wrote:
An allotted announcement;
Ben’s brother balances
Carefully, carrying containers
Designated “Dogma Delivery.”
Eventually, everyone
Finds frog-gy feelings for
Generously generated
Hair-raising hijinks.
Incoherent ideas incur.
Jeremiah jumps, jolting,
Kicking kleptomaniacs,
Lashing lawlessness.
Money monkeys make
Notorious nincompoops.
Obscure obligations often
Poisons pathetic passion!
Quarantining qualified
Representatives,
Shrivels support,
Transforming truth-
Unilaterally, unfairly
Vexing vicariously.
While we want
Xanadu,
Yokels yield
Zion’s zenith
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11/30/2010 10:22:44 AM

James Tate
Posts: 4
Wow! Improsie, your abecedarian worked welll for you. I couldn't find your word Xanadu in my two old dictionaries, so I looked it up on line and found it to mean a place of great beauty, luxury and contentment. So I benefitted both by the good poem and learning a new word. Thanks. James
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12/29/2010 3:52:10 PM

Eiken Laan
Posts: 10
Wonderful poem, I love it.
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