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9/4/2013 8:19:53 PM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
Who

What

When

Where

Why

Then there's room for a lie

What makes the news?

What makes the blues?

What makes people the authority over who and how others pay dues?

The endless struggle for world domination

Pink and the Brain

Their world is a piece of salt or grain

It's the dashed on the map that separate boundaries

Citizens who separate land, and carry mystical stories

Who creates these stories?

Those who want to conquer fear, worry

There's those who work to eat and pay bills and take care of family

At the end of the day they relax with their families happily

There are those who work to make money beyond pure necessity

Covering necessity, buy random stuff,

Then want,mud, houses, clothing, and air

Time to call a mans bluff, might end in dispear
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