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2/1/2013 1:20:15 PM

Mest Kiphen
Posts: 4
The sun beats down on a leather face,

The burnt remnants of a trying past.

Saddened eyes gazing towards nothing,

The empty stare of a life harassed.




A single pair of footsteps trailing,

Disappearing into the distance.

Weighted footprints from a heavy heart,

The proof of lonely perseverance.




Barely standing on two blood stained feet,

Supporting old knees so rickety.

A silhouette wavering in wind,

The epitome of frailty.




Essence escapes from every pore,

A heavy musk, reeking of defeat.

The remains of a figure once proud,

Desire's fire finally obsolete.




Well versed in the language of failure,

Silent screams, shattered dreams so hollow.

The crying sun eternally sets,

Dark shadows stretch until tomorrow.




A weary soul in search of haven,

Quickly rejected by Heaven's Gate.

Overcome with exhaustion, yet still,

Reluctant to surrender to fate.
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