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12/28/2012 2:40:29 AM

fengwenshu sanglin
Posts: 30
My more beautiful than sun rose, Dath robbed

Rose,s white sweet, yet green lotus lips on singing,
I heartbroken crying aloud.Ah!why sudden jumped Out
Of mouth of snake night,Killed air,hope,time,Cosmos.
I must huged my lover-To Be,i killed my Love Rival-Not
To Be.ever Defying Death,i for my Baby alive.red pain
My chest seemed to burst.let me calm!is illusion? i my
Rose kissing sweet.why,my joy crying?i laughing,used my
Hand, covering my mouth,ah!is i-lotus,s pain who
Didst waken from Life of my life-small green leaf-baby,
S dream Pring?do not cry,joy,come,mama hug.got your lip
Received honey sea,mama kissed you? ay!you used thee
Nod so answer smiling.you are my air,hope,time-baby,
Bigest one.car killed your papa,when i unable endures my
pain, i wanted to commit suicide,but,my own MAMA-LOVE,
Makes me be loving my life heartily. your burning this
Thousand ice-mountain.In world,if you Don't exist,love
Culture, water,soil,beauty becomes East fish-i,sall
Die,for flower bird grass,s sigh lonely,will
Blow this the East fish-i, to Death,s eat-desk up.that
Please listen to poetry,you are a green dew,joy singing
Dances on red face of july.my inner secrets pregnant with
You from sky birth to now, flys silver light twinkles Song,
By frogs choir,from the dark river bank. frogs singing
Thee-dew,to nil-body,s people.tis
It seems that lotus,s chest would break with pain,Death


By the Chinese poet fengwenshu
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1/5/2013 7:00:43 PM

Abdulhafeez Oyewole
Posts: 2
fengwenshu wrote:
My more beautiful than sun rose, Dath robbed

Rose,s white sweet, yet green lotus lips on singing,
I heartbroken crying aloud.Ah!why sudden jumped Out
Of mouth of snake night,Killed air,hope,time,Cosmos.
I must huged my lover-To Be,i killed my Love Rival-Not
To Be.ever Defying Death,i for my Baby alive.red pain
My chest seemed to burst.let me calm!is illusion? i my
Rose kissing sweet.why,my joy crying?i laughing,used my
Hand, covering my mouth,ah!is i-lotus,s pain who
Didst waken from Life of my life-small green leaf-baby,
S dream Pring?do not cry,joy,come,mama hug.got your lip
Received honey sea,mama kissed you? ay!you used thee
Nod so answer smiling.you are my air,hope,time-baby,
Bigest one.car killed your papa,when i unable endures my
pain, i wanted to commit suicide,but,my own MAMA-LOVE,
Makes me be loving my life heartily. your burning this
Thousand ice-mountain.In world,if you Don't exist,love
Culture, water,soil,beauty becomes East fish-i,sall
Die,for flower bird grass,s sigh lonely,will
Blow this the East fish-i, to Death,s eat-desk up.that
Please listen to poetry,you are a green dew,joy singing
Dances on red face of july.my inner secrets pregnant with
You from sky birth to now, flys silver light twinkles Song,
By frogs choir,from the dark river bank. frogs singing
Thee-dew,to nil-body,s people.tis
It seems that lotus,s chest would break with pain,Death


By the Chinese poet fengwenshu
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1/5/2013 7:04:11 PM

Abdulhafeez Oyewole
Posts: 2
Only that I can't wait any longer
I would have shake your words

With my Cutting grass as sharpen scissor

Behold my way another day

And I shall rise to your wit in Manifold,

_Princehto
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