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12/19/2012 12:13:58 AM

Jackson Kilgrow
Posts: 2
a well dressed mess,

I am but a man

with a sinister past

seeking redemption.




b*tching,

ranting,

and venting,

the three verbs I tend

to utilize while writing.

because writing is my outlet,

my craved aperture,

my superlative release.




I feel the genius today.

I love every word, letter,

and line that I'm writing.

you know what though?

tomorrow I'll hate them.

I'll think this *****is worthless

as I consider deleting it all.

But I can't part with it.

like my utter inability to

forget & let go of this fading

amatory connection whose

love once gave me hope as

well as sex that left scars,

both cerebral and somatic.

I loved her so ****ing much

and if I'm being honest,

I still do




as a parting favor

I simply ask you not

to confound these

words I write with

apathy and despair.

they may sting off

the tip of my tongue

but they come from

a place that's sincere

and filled with more

than mere goodwill.

I have but a crestfallen

& despondent perspective.




This, too, will

pass with time.

or so they say.







-Jackson Kilgrow

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