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11/4/2012 1:16:26 PM
Who on earth trampled your heart somuch
Stop taking your anger out on us
Seems like your taking your revenge outon all women
Pretty sure that on it's own is a sin
Your going to save everyone frommissing dollars?
Are you planning to giving us yourmoney you big baller?
Didnt' think so,
Shut up and sit down
Let the grown ups talk and work thisout
United Stated isn't a play ground
We're not Yatzi dice you can throwaround
We're people, even the 47% that youdont care about
Hope your car doesn't break down aroundhere
When the wild west doesn't likesomeone, it's a scarey town
Of course you'd have your shotgun,
Your entourage, your pitbull
And cant forget golden teeth
Those things along will block thebullet from anyone that takes a peek.
Hopefully next week I'll have my way
And you'll be forced to see four yearsof what could've been your payday
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