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8/13/2012 10:41:08 PM

Sharon Morken
Posts: 133
Counter of happy pills all lined up,
Pride gets in the way,

Wont admit your heads ****ed up,

Tricked yourself believing past stays behind,

Knows damn well it's what go you in this grind,




Recognize it, deal with it, move on

Like lifting weights, emotions make you strong




Refuse to be real,

From yourself you steal,

Ability to be happy,

Emotions are counterfeit,

treat people crappy




Recognize it, deal with it, move on

Like lifting weights, emotions make your strong




Fear of uncertainty prohibits you from change,

Future hopes and dreams are further deranged,

Emotional turmoil surrounds, your standing in a ring of fire

Dealing with you, my oh my ,makes me so so tired.
edited by svlynn18 on 8/14/2012
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9/16/2012 4:38:35 AM

Amy Green
Posts: 8
Sweety, try originality. You have the ideas, you just need the words. Seriously, work on that vocab and presentation
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