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8/9/2012 12:34:55 AM

Angela Yarbrough
Posts: 3
I once met a little girl named Tank.
At five years of age her old sole wasn't fake.
I asked her how are you today ma'am?
With big brown eyes she peered up at the sky,
Then looked at me,
Opened her mouth up wide and said,
Better..........
I though to myself,
Yesterday I wonder how she felt.
The next day came I asked her the same.
How are you today ma'am?
With big brown eyes she peered up at the sky,
Then looked at me
Opened her mouth up wide and said
Better..........
One more time
I'll give it a try.
So the third day was here,
My words were clear.
How are you today ma'am?
With big brown eyes she peered up at the sky,
Then looked at me,
Opened her mouth up wide and said,
Better..........
All at once the mystery was revealed.
I knew it was real.
What was said long ago,
When poetry was first told
Out of the mouth of infants and nursing babies.........
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