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7/26/2012 7:32:56 PM
Built on acres of lush land untouched by any other
Inherited through the coupling of father and mother
Natures finest and rawest treasures ban together to erect a structure so exquisite
Only those who are granted permission may visit
Take your shoes off as you enter
Or you'll be eaten alive by whats at it's center
A foundation of diamond depths so deep
That the pressure will put the most experienced diver to sleep.
Walls of Tungsten and gems laced with portraits of those who've passed
Bathroom full of toilet paper soft and moist enough to wipe the most powerful ass
A kitchen with the capacity to chef up the best
Stocked with equipment necessary to screw over the rest
A fireplace like an incinerator
Shelves stocked with greatness at it's center
You have to stand on your own here
learn to breathe your own air
Rooms, chambers and secret corridors
Conceal what should be left behind closed doors
Housing different degrees of love, pain, and struggle.
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