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7/10/2012 10:12:49 PM

Joe Geraci
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Thank you for reading my poem - Wild Beasts at Play

where shadows devour twilight
there are wild beasts at play
they dwell in their aphotic world
and we are two of the same

Your eyes, their amber burn
with embers heavy like the stars
bear weight to rest upon my feeble heart

what a burden

and what a burden
to have a taste
for it to be ripped away like the light of day

while by natures chords
the sky is spun like a cosmic gyre
your allure emanates pain like a wild fire
and we are two of the same

your cries howl the night
your hide as black as it's affliction
our dark sunken minds
we are wild beasts at play
edited by JG90 on 7/10/2012
edited by JG90 on 7/10/2012
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