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Sapphic Stanza - Please Read - Embarrassing


Blog Posted:8/29/2013 7:15:00 AM
How embarrassing is this!! 
 the blog example I gave you was not correct so I deleted it. Talk about red faced. I will write a correct one but for now here is the example which is correct from the soup forms.

        RED cheeked/BOY friends/TEN der ly/KISS me/SWEET mouthed
        UN der/BOUL der/COV er lets/WIN ter/SPRING time
        HUG me/NAk ed/LAUGH ing and/TELL ing/GIRL friends
                 GOS sip til/AU tumn

So three lines are /_   /_   /_ _  /_  /_
And the final line is /_ _  /_

Red cheeked boyfriends tenderly kiss me sweet mouthed
under Boulder coverlets winter springtime
hug me naked laughing & telling girl friends
gossip til autumn



I"M SO SORRY !!!

More examples of correct form

The Australian poet John Tranter has also written a poem ("Writing in the Manner of Sappho") in two Sapphic stanzas about the difficulty of writing Sapphics in English:

Writing Sapphics well is a tricky business.
Lines begin and end with a pair of trochees;
in between them dozes a dactyl, rhythm
rising and falling,
like a drunk asleep at a party. Ancient
Greek — the language seemed to be made for Sapphics,
not a worry; anyone used to English
finds it a bastard.
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  1. Date: 8/30/2013 1:25:00 PM
    yayyy, no wonder i couldn;t start this one.. not your fault exactly, craig.. sapphic is a darn hard form; shall i pass this one?.. okay, i'll really try!..: huggs

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    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 8/30/2013 3:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You can do it!!
  1. Date: 8/30/2013 3:02:00 AM
    I love the challenges you give me, Craig...like the Ottima Riva...I want to take this baby on! I'm so glad I didn't start on it yet, and thanks so much for clarifying...I'm not making any promises, but I will give it a go! The pic of you two is absolutely awesome! Lovely couple...

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    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian Date: 8/30/2013 3:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    OK....I'm a little set back by not placing on your reverse contest...I tried my best, but....I will try for this one...
  1. Date: 8/29/2013 3:30:00 PM
    Well Craig, Thanks for the info but I'm scared to death of this baby...DEFINITELY don't think I'm up to it...Also, thanks for placing my poem in your most recent...By the way, who is the lovely lady in your latest picture? - Tim

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    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 8/29/2013 3:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    She was 50 in this photo
    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 8/29/2013 3:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You mean the lucky lady---just kidding--that's my wife of 32 years--that picture was taken 8 years ago.
  1. Date: 8/29/2013 2:44:00 PM
    Craig ... Craig ... : D ... (moving my head).

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    Suspect Avatar Usual Suspect Date: 8/29/2013 3:57:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    : D ! I love Craig ... and when he get s mad: more!
    Ryerson Avatar Tim Ryerson Date: 8/29/2013 3:40:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Why you wanna' be pickin on an old m...
    Ryerson Avatar Tim Ryerson Date: 8/29/2013 3:35:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ruben...Ruben...(moving my head)...Okay okay! Can't you take a joke? I was moving my head up and down see? What the...Ouch!
    Suspect Avatar Usual Suspect Date: 8/29/2013 2:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I'll google this form ... now, I'm interested.
  1. Date: 8/29/2013 11:37:00 AM
    hmmm, I have started my poem!! but now I will have to make the appropriate changes. I needed more syllables for some lines, so that is a good thing!!!

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    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 8/29/2013 12:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Sorry!! So glad I caught it early--glad you needed more!!
  1. Date: 8/29/2013 8:34:00 AM
    Hi Craig....I too, was red-faced with frustration, yesterday, while trying to make an attempt at writing for your new contest! This contest/form (for me, at least).....is more than a challenge..... do you hear me groaning???......... I haven't given up yet, but now I know why I lean toward free verse! I think my Ba-boom ba-boom.....rhythms are out of sync in the way a true poet hears her verse....... Thanks for the help, and I'll try it even it shames me !!!!

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