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Deborah Guzzi travels for inspiration: China, Nepal [during the civil war], Japan, Egypt [two weeks before ‘The Arab Spring’], and most recently Peru. First published at the age of sixteen, she writes articles for Massage and Aroma Therapy Magazines. Her poetry has been accepted in the Literary Journals of Western CT. University, Inclement Magazine, Pyrokinections, Jellyfish Whispers, Grey Wolf’s Summer Legends Anthology, The Germ, Wilderness Literary Review, The Anthology Sweet Dreams & Night Terrors, Bitterzoet Magazine, haiku journal, Contemporary Haibun Online, Bella on line, The Autumn Sound, Eskimo Pie, and Ribbons, The Inwood Indiana Review, Five Poetry, Tanka Society of America Journal, and 50 haiku. She has published two illustrated volumes of poetry, The Healing Heart and Heaven and Hell in a Nutshell.


Monoku


Blog Posted:12/5/2013 7:33:00 AM

Here is the Poetry Soup definition of Monoku

Definition

A haiku in a single horizontal line.

Example

an icicle the moon drifting through it

Matsuo Allard (Bird Day Afternoon, High/Coo Press, 1978)

IF this was presented in 3 lines it would look like this

an icicle --
the moon drifting
through it

the season word is icicle, it IS 2 parts


This article is by MY teacher

Michael Dylan Welsh


Haiku is a brief genre of poetry that typically captures a moment of sensory perception, often with a seasonal reference (kigo, or season word) and a two-part juxtapositional structure (equivalent to a kireji, or cutting word) that conveys or implies an emotion. Senryu ( more accurately 
presented in English as senryu, with a macron) is similar to haiku except that it tends to be more satirical or ironic in tone, and does not need to include a season word or two-part structure (although some senryu may still include these elements yet still be considered a senryu). Some people think of haiku as focusing on nature, with senryu focusing on people, but this is misleading. The fact is that many haiku by the Japanese masters also focus on people, so having human content is not a distinguishing factor. Furthermore, haiku is actually a seasonal poem, not strictly a nature poem (many of the kigo that haiku aim at are in fact not nature-related), although nature often comes along for the ride. Instead, it is usually tone that differentiates haiku and senryu. Haiku tend to celebrate their subjects (even if dark), whereas senryu tend to have a “victim,” and may or may not be humourous. Haiku typically treat their subjects reverently, whereas senryu do so irreverently. Haiku try to make a feeling, and senryu try to make a point. And if haiku is a finger pointing to the moon, senryu is a finger poking you in the ribs. [Read the preceding text in Simplified Chinese.]
        More than 4,000 of my haiku and senryu have appeared in hundreds of journals and anthologies, and have been translated into at least sixteen languages (most recently Turkish, Swahili, and Punjabi). This page presents selections of these poems. For additional poems, click the links on the Books and Trifolds pages, and see also Sequences and An Interview for Writing It Real.

If you click on the UNDERLINED WORDS you will be brought to HIS web pages. After ALL these years TRYING so hard to teach you WHAT a haiku is

and what it isn't PLEASE [see Debbie praying on bended knee?]


Don't FORGET just because you are writing the verse in a SINGLE LINE rather than in 3 lines IT IS STILL A HAIKU.

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  1. Date: 12/6/2013 6:58:00 AM
    Me Mainer or Adam Mainer? LOL I don't like my new avatar it's too blurry!

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    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 12/6/2013 8:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Both of you!
  1. Date: 12/6/2013 6:58:00 AM
    By the way Yasmin got 4 haiku accepted to the haiku journal!! GO TEAM!

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    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 12/6/2013 8:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yea Yasmin----you go Lady!
  1. Date: 12/5/2013 6:31:00 PM
    Hey Mainer--can you tell me where my new bio picture is located--and don't say Maine---I took it about 6 years ago.

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    Hapworth Avatar Adam Hapworth Date: 12/6/2013 8:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Valley Rd, Lynchville, ME Directions:On the northeast side of Hwy 35/Valley Rd at its intersection with Hwy 5/Crooked River Causeway.
  1. Date: 12/5/2013 3:35:00 PM
    Thanks Marlon! Either you like my honesty or you don't, because I am the kind of friend who wouldn't let you [generic you, here] walk around with toilet paper hanging off the back of your pants! To me friends don't let friends look less smart than they really are! by calling a plum an apple!

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  1. Date: 12/5/2013 3:32:00 PM
    LOL Caleb did you just write me a message in senryu form???

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  1. Date: 12/5/2013 3:01:00 PM
    Debbie prays the rules have been bent with her Lol...couldn't resist..;) I'm poking Debbie in the ribs. Is it senryu? ... or nothing at all?

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    Smith Avatar Caleb Smith Date: 12/5/2013 3:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Crap...supposed to be spaced out. Debbie prays...the rules have been bent...with her
  1. Date: 12/5/2013 12:28:00 PM
    Thanks for the lesson. Your abundance of knowledge is very intriguing to me. The Monoku, Haiku, and Senryu amazes me... The concentration of words with a big picture scenario.

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    Henderson Avatar Charles Henderson Date: 12/8/2013 12:28:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Good to have you back on Marlon.
  1. Date: 12/5/2013 9:03:00 AM
    Adam if you like I will go look at your haiku BUT not if you are going to get upset with me

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    Hapworth Avatar Adam Hapworth Date: 12/5/2013 12:38:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Debbie for your valued input. I hope to learn from it.
    Hapworth Avatar Adam Hapworth Date: 12/5/2013 11:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Clinton, basically dead center between Bangor and Augusta. Just north of Waterville.
    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 12/5/2013 11:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Adam--Central maine--where LA-Bangor-Augusta?
    Hapworth Avatar Adam Hapworth Date: 12/5/2013 9:34:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    The would be my most recent entries.
    Hapworth Avatar Adam Hapworth Date: 12/5/2013 9:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Debbie, You can say whatever you like about what I write :) Its more for fun then anythign to fret over. (Central Mainer all my life :) )
  1. Date: 12/5/2013 9:02:00 AM
    You do get it Craig MORE than 50% of the time! What I keep have trouble with [actually 2 things] you should not do 'cause & effect' because then the fragmented line is not a 'surprise/ahhhHA etc. & just describing things which yes it's a fine feeling of place but basically you come away saying SO WHAT? again it's a problem with the single line [not the connected 2 lines]

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    cornish Avatar craig cornish Date: 12/5/2013 11:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    will try harder with this monoku
  1. Date: 12/5/2013 8:54:00 AM
    I changed my around as well. It’s different poem but the same feel and expression. I had the right syllable count but couldn't break it down properly.

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  1. Date: 12/5/2013 8:33:00 AM
    Thanks Debbie, don't give up on me yet--I'm a slow learner but once I get it!! (If I ever really do)

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  1. Date: 12/5/2013 7:51:00 AM
    You need 2 parts, even if you don't put the -- cut marker IN, there still must be 2 parts. No matter if it's 5/7/5 or less.

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