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Deborah Guzzi travels for inspiration: China, Nepal [during the civil war], Japan, Egypt [two weeks before ‘The Arab Spring’], and most recently Peru. First published at the age of sixteen, she writes articles for Massage and Aroma Therapy Magazines. Her poetry has been accepted in the Literary Journals of Western CT. University, Inclement Magazine, Pyrokinections, Jellyfish Whispers, Grey Wolf’s Summer Legends Anthology, The Germ, Wilderness Literary Review, The Anthology Sweet Dreams & Night Terrors, Bitterzoet Magazine, haiku journal, Contemporary Haibun Online, Bella on line, The Autumn Sound, Eskimo Pie, and Ribbons, The Inwood Indiana Review, Five Poetry, Tanka Society of America Journal, and 50 haiku. She has published two illustrated volumes of poetry, The Healing Heart and Heaven and Hell in a Nutshell.


Haibun Prose Poetry and haiku


Blog Posted:2/5/2013 3:54:00 PM

What wonderful writingeveryone who tried the form haibun in the Mix It Up Contest did!!! So wonderful
in fact that I am doing a new contest using the haibun form again! I do not want the hard work you all put in polishing your haiku to be lost. Your Prose Poetry was exquisite and such a pleasure to read, so enjoyable for a word hound like me. I wanted to let you know how proud I am you participated in the learning process.

[Please note, I did not require season words in your haiku which pushed some of them into the more modern category.]

Below from Wikipedia you will find more complete info on Haibun.

PLEASE keep going! The new Contest will focus on SPRING.


[The term "haibun" was first used by the 17th century Japanese poet, Matsuo Basho, in a letter to his disciple Kyorai in 1690. Basho was a prominent early writer of haibun, then a new genre combining classical prototypes, Chinese prose genres and vernacular subject matter and language. He wrote some haibun as travel accounts during his various journeys, the most famous of which is Oku no Hosomichi (Narrow Road to the Interior). Basho's shorter haibun include compositions devoted to travel and others focusing on character sketches, landscape scenes, anecdotal vignettes and occasional writings written to honor a specific patron or event. His Hut of the Phantom Dwelling can be classified as an essay while, in Saga Nikki (Saga Diary), he documents his day-to-day activities with his disciples on a summer retreat.

Traditional haibun typically took the form of a short description of a place, person or object, or a diary of a journey or other series of events in the poet's life.  Haibun continued to be written by later haikai poets such as Yosa Buson, Kobayashi Issa and Masaoka Shiki.

 Haibun in English

Haibun is no longer confined to Japan, and has established itself as a genre in world literature which has gained momentum in recent years.

The first contest for English-language haibun took place in 1996, organized by Michael Dylan Welch,* and judged by Tom Lynch and Cor van den Heuvel. Anita Virgil won first prize, and David Cobb won second prize. The contest resulted in the publication of Wedge of Light (Press Here) in 1999. The first anthology of English-language haibun was Bruce Ross's Journey to the Interior: American Versions of Haibun (Tuttle), published
in 1998.]

*Charles Henderson,Yasmin Khan, Poet Kash, Dane-Ann & a few others have been under the
tutelage of Michael Dylan Walsh for about 2 years now of an on and the haiku
Checklist I asked most of you to print out is written by him.

I have posted comments on some of your writes and I would like you to TRY to write your Prose Poetry [ie: the narrative part] in THE PRESENT TENSE. Bring us to the moment of the memory with you and ILLUSTRATE it with your haiku, bringing in the SIGHTS, SOUNDS, SCENTS, and Tactile feel in the story.



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  1. Date: 2/6/2013 9:34:00 AM
    I have believed in YOU Yassie since day one, and I only wish I could do more! You have a home with me always but I have no idea how you could get to me and there are your lovely girls too. Sometimes it is so hard to be a woman. XXXOO

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  1. Date: 2/6/2013 6:05:00 AM
    Debbie many thanks for my placement, will give this a go in the present tense...David

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  1. Date: 2/6/2013 6:00:00 AM
    I thought that was difficult but am willing to give it another go thanks for placing me Debbie xx

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  1. Date: 2/6/2013 5:24:00 AM
    Hey guys NO ONE was hurt by using past tense..I was just having fun talking to you ,, I could blab forever BUT it is true & does make more sense if we write the haiku as if we are in the moment,, the prose [to match it!] would be more powerful in the ptrsent tense [sat on my glasses can't see so excuse the mispellings?]

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    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/6/2013 10:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ja, if the haiku is written in present tense, having the prose match present tense, makes for a much better haibun(*DISCLAIMER* -- In my opinion).
    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards Date: 2/6/2013 5:33:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Debbie, for a very interesting contest and keeping us on our toes. Your comments are appreciated. Love, Su
  1. Date: 2/6/2013 3:07:00 AM
    Thank you for my placement in your contest, Debbie - much appreciated. I did not have time to change the prose to present tense as I am pressed for time (re studies). - I can't recall it being stated in the contest rules. I wrote mine in the form of a travel journal (just one of the forms of haibun) and the tense featured suited the naration (to my mind). I will remember the note for future haibun. Haiku is a personal preference here on PS and I have employed mine to change the mood - the "intervals" between the naration. Congratulations to all the winners. I will get to reading and perhaps commenting, some time this weekend. Love, Su

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  1. Date: 2/5/2013 8:58:00 PM
    Enjoyed this contest...though I did not have time to change it to present tense. My sister (teacher) gave me some new knowledge tonight that I might use on the Spring one. Thanks for my placement. To me getting the haiku right was the hardest part....well other than not knowing you wanted present tense lol That then became a new challenge....and hope I'm up to it. Blessings to ya !! Will read winners tomorrow.

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  1. Date: 2/5/2013 8:03:00 PM
    Am I the only one who doesnt like this form? LOL! : )

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    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/7/2013 8:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ok...now, Im going to read the winners' list! LOL!
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/7/2013 12:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Blah, blah, blah, blah....
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/7/2013 12:44:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I enjoy it when the prose and haiku/tanka work off each other, instead of one section being a redundant explanation of the other, etc.
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/7/2013 12:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    R(h)ubarb, I understand wot you are getting at. In my biased opinion and taste, I have the haiku/tanka incorporate an extra detail not included in the prose, so there is still a little "aha" moment in the bridges; if one completely mirrors the prose in the haiku/tanka, then one is hitting the reader over the head with the obvious. Again, in my biased taste, there are a few other things that makes for a good haibun, separating it from flat, redundant mediocrity.
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/6/2013 8:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I think that the introduction-explanation-prose-paragraph ruins the haiku-tanka magic....It's my humble opinion. However, my opinion doesnt count because I've not written a single poem using this form... Im going to try Deborah's next contest...maybe Im wrong...maybe I still have time to fall in love with haibun poetry. : )
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/6/2013 8:06:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    When I write (or try to write) or read a haiku or tanka, I really enjoy the magic, the aha moment, the riddle effect...I think this form works against it.
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/6/2013 10:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I am not sure if I like the: ru(bun) form.
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/6/2013 10:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I think that I might know wot you are implying?(as far as your possible misconception goes :P)....but then again, I might not know wot you are implying, so I am not going to assume too much. Do you see the paralleled(or bridging) haiku/tanka and prose, to sort of be overkill? Making the poem too obvious?
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/6/2013 12:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I dont know why I dont like this form...I think (perhaps a misconception) that it's like explaining the poem (haiku , tanka, etc).
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/6/2013 12:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    My reply was referring to the haibun form in general, and obviously doesn't include the biases and possible restrictions of contests.
    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner Date: 2/6/2013 12:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ruben, one can use as many haiku and as much prose as one deems fit, for a haibun. Also, there is tanka-haibun which I enjoy, and one can hybridize haiku/tanka-haibun too(wotever one wants). Why don't you like the haibun form?
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/5/2013 8:10:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ok...Im going to try it! : ) So...it's 3 sentences-paragraph and a three lines haiku? Spring? ...
    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 2/5/2013 8:07:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey, If you are into pain, sweat, tears, then may I suggest David's contest. I needed antacids! Holy shmoly and I may have done it wrong! Dare ya, chum. Try it! Brain-yoga. No kidding. Hugs to you! :) Cyndi
  1. Date: 2/5/2013 8:02:00 PM
    I'm GOBSMACKED! Haibun is uber fun. Thanks for introducing me to this sumptuous form and for my placement (!?!) Just read Caties and I was so ... wrenched... by her words, I'm not certain I can do more reading/writing tonight. This must have been a very difficult contest to judge! And yes, when I know I can do better and have the time and the contest isn't closing, I am absolutely one for giving 'er another go! We learn by practicing the art and trying, always trying, to find the creative balance between listening to sage advice from those experienced and trusting our own creative instincts, becoming comfortable with our voice, growing...confident. Such a gift your teaching is to Soup! Such a terror are the outspoken students ;-) xox Dee, still growing, finding her footing.

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  1. Date: 2/5/2013 7:45:00 PM
    I think this was my favourite contest to date. I love the mixing of prose and haiku. Thank you for introducing us to this form - and for being such a great teacher! All of the winning poems I've read so far are fantastic.

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  1. Date: 2/5/2013 6:12:00 PM
    I couldn't be more pleased that YOU are pleased. I gave as many of you as I could special attention and the progress you have made in understanding what is in a haiku and how to construct a haiku is fantastic!

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  1. Date: 2/5/2013 5:32:00 PM
    Ditto on all the comments below!!!

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    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards Date: 2/6/2013 3:21:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    One of us had a makeover...?
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/5/2013 8:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Who's this stud? : )
  1. Date: 2/5/2013 5:19:00 PM
    I have been reading the amazing prose/haiku combinations, and have been astonished by the talent I see on Poetry Soup. This contest was such a fun challenge...but wow, a lot time spent reading, you must have been up late at night, Debbie! Thank you very much for sponsoring this great contest, and placing mine among such great writers! I'm pleased to be in such fine company. :)

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  1. Date: 2/5/2013 5:13:00 PM
    Thank you so much, Deb, for my placement in your contest. What an honor it is. :) I will be back tomorrow morning to read and comment on your winners. Congratulations to all the winners! love and hugs, Catie :)

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  1. Date: 2/5/2013 4:18:00 PM
    deb, this was one of your best contests to date. I really enjoyed reading the winter stories it produced! Congrats to all your winners and thanks for my placement.

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