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Never would I have thought I would start
writing at 73 years of age. I have thoroughly enjoyed my voyage into the written spirituality of poetry and am thankful for the opportunity.  In my four years here I have met many new and wonderful persons. Having them accept me as a friend has been a moving experience.
               
    

     


Calling All, Want To Be, Haiku Writers


Blog Posted:2/20/2014 3:46:00 PM
A cherry blossom--              5 syllables
the lake placidly reflects       7 syllables
snow on Mt. Fuji                  5 syllables

The famous Basho said that haiku only reveal 80 per cent of the sensory perception transmitted from one person to another by the words of a haiku. The reason is to leave something to each reader’s imagination- - - to fill in the blanks, so to speak.
We transmit these feelings by way of sensory words stemming from sight, sound, taste, touch and smell. The old basic haiku stopped with these but more modern haiku also include emotions,

trembling hands              ie: 1 and 2 are a complete phrase of one thought.
caught her by the belt -- dashes or 3 dots are to make the reader pause and
cliff's edge                     reflect, then read the rest as another thought

Any haiku, depending on what you want to say and how you want to present it, may have the pause at end of line 1 or the end of line 2. It depends on how the poet wants to present the surprise or (a more proper term is) THE TURN, OR THE CUT.

IF YOU READ TO THE END OF LINE 1 AND FIND THE CUT, THEN 1 IS THE FRAGMENT, AND 2 PLUS 3 ARE THE PHRASE.  THIS GIVES THE POEM TWO PARTS.  IT GIVES YOU A SUBJECT AND THEN GIVES YOU SOMETHING COMPARED TO, OR RELATED TO THE SUBJECT TO SHOW IT IN A COMPLETELY DIFFERENT WAY.  THE FARTHER YOU CAN SHIFT THIS RELATIONSHIP THE GREATER THE SURPRISE IN THE SECOND PART.  iF YOU SAY "A BLUE CAR/A RED BOAT/A GOOD TIME,  YOU SIMPLY HAVE THREE SEPARATE PARTS WHICH ARE NOT A HAIKU.  ONE OF THE THREE THINGS, THO ALIKE, MUST BE GRAMMATICALLY LINKED TO ONE OF THE OTHER TWO SO THAT THERE WILL ONLY BE TWO PARTS TO THE POEM. 

IF YOU READ ALL THE WAY TO THE END OF LINE 2 AND FIND THE CUT MARK, THEN LINE 1 COMBINES WITH LINE 2 FOR THE PHRASE AND LINE 3 IS THE FRAGMENT.)

NOT COMPLICATED, JUST TWO DIFFERENT WAYS TO PRESENT THE MOST IMPORTANT OBVIOUS FACT OF THE POEM)

Line 3 takes you completely away from the subject of lines 1 and 2, but is still related. In other words line 1 and 2 do not really make sense, like “so what” But in concert with line 3 the thought is complete and you see someone (a child?), maybe saved from an accident.

Please note that the first line only has 3 syllables.----- Modern haiku (not haikus) have trimmed the acceptable number of syllables. You no longer have to have 5/7/5. You may now write as few syllables as are “needed” to adequately express and transfer the emotion or perception intended by the poem, yet it must still be readily recognized as haiku. I will not be the one to say that one syllable placed on each of three lines is “not haiku”, but I will venture to say that it is perilously close to being considered “not haiku”. For one thing it seems to lose the authority and form of original haiku. By form I mean the 5/7/5 look. But if a three syallable haiku is you, then be my guest. I am not the judge. I would say a 1/2/1 retains the look of a haiku but not the sincerity nor the feel of one. However, every message is different and after you become proficient enough to KNOW that you know how to write haiku, if you wish to do a 1/2/1 by all means do it. The reader will have the final say if it is or is not good haiku.

My feeling is, it is too hard to retain the serious nature of haiku(not only of content, but form and content) to adequately convey your feelings, ie: emotions, with a 1/2/1. When one speaks of the serious nature of haiku, one doesn’t mean serious as with grave tones. One means serious as in determined to do it correctly. It is true, the tone is of a more profound nature than senryu, but haiku can be light and airy and still be serious about conforming to known norms and “rules”. I prefer the term ”norms” much more because it stems from how the preponderance of haiku writers are forming what is known as the contemporary haiku.

The defining trait of haiku has been and is still considered to be the season word. Without it one has a more valid point that it is no longer haiku but senryu, which is the same form, but taken less seriously than haiku, in consideration of form and/or content. It is usually more on the order of bathroom wall poetry or certainly of a more frivolous nature. I did not include a season word in the second haiku because the subject is pertinent to all seasons.


This is not just for new people on the soup. It is for anyone who does not feel comfortable writing haiku simply because you do not understand it. Please use the guidelines I have in this blog and enter a poem to this blog if you wish. Instead of writing three separate lines you can separate each line with a slash and write it in one continuous line. I’m sure there are plenty of qualified soupers who will give you a SOFT critique on the write.  



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  1. Date: 4/30/2014 7:59:00 AM
    Charles, Since I am a frustrated wanna "be short for adept", I enjoy your words of wisdom!! Whether they work with me is another subject, but I will try---Hope you are well!

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  1. Date: 2/25/2014 7:24:00 AM
    Tnks for sharing this blog.You along with some other soupers were my first inspirers to learn proper haiku..Tnks to you,Deborah ,Michael and others,my haiku are getting published.Great info.

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    Henderson Avatar Charles Henderson Date: 2/25/2014 8:58:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Charmaine
  1. Date: 2/24/2014 9:16:00 AM
    the waning moon -/shadows of cat tails dance/to wind on water

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  1. Date: 2/23/2014 4:02:00 PM
    I have happily written a few haiku, learning as I go what I didn't previously know, and now you tell me more. I'm not sure that I have used the cut to much effect in the past. Thanks for the influence you now have over my future haiku, and for that matter senryu (which I am now enjoying much more). Cheers Scott

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  1. Date: 2/23/2014 6:47:00 AM
    first snow/ from the jay's beak/ a full moon rises// By Matthew M. Cariello, published by Daily Haiku (contemporary haiku, wonderful stuff) Matthew M. Carielloa senior lecturer in English at the Ohio State University, Columbus. His poems, haiku, stories and reviews have appeared in Poet Lore, Evening Street Review, Frogpond, Modern Haiku, The Long Story, The Indiana Review, Iron Horse, VIA, and The Journal. I really enjoy the haiku here and enjoy writing them with this kind of insight and tone. Good blog, Charles. Happy Sunday!

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    Henderson Avatar Charles Henderson Date: 2/23/2014 10:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I agree, Cyndi, you would not believe the amount of total trash I have on my computer that no one has ever seen but me. I say trash because there is no other way to describe it. But, like the man said, hey, it's my trash.
    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 2/23/2014 3:59:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Charles, I think its great what you seek for self.. we all have a skill we'd like to sharpen. But, perhaps because of all the people I've lost, my awareness of the fragility of life, I will ever defend the need to simply create for the love of creation-- joy is individual, needs no perfection, simply IS... smile from me
    Henderson Avatar Charles Henderson Date: 2/23/2014 12:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I agree, it is strictly about the effect the poem has on the reader. But strangely the same words spoken in any other form/context, may not have the same impact. I think that is the magic of saying what you want to say in the form it is fitted to.
    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 2/23/2014 6:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    2/4/5... I think, to me, to many who enjoy contemporary haiku, it is about what the poet captured, the moment, the observation, the insight they share that magically becomes our own. It's a sweet spot or almost painful, because we have seen or experienced that moment, too. It's definitely not about syllables. ;)
  1. Date: 2/21/2014 5:37:00 PM
    Thanks for the reminder on writing, i get lots of pleasure in writing haikus.

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  1. Date: 2/21/2014 4:00:00 PM
    Thanks for the reminder, Charles. Great blog.

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    Lindsey Avatar Catie Lindsey Date: 2/22/2014 9:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Holy Cow! LOL :)
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/22/2014 6:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Here, Giorgo ... it's on my head. : D
    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V. Date: 2/22/2014 5:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Is that you Roo? Where is thine Hat?
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 2/21/2014 8:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It's my holy cow with glasses. : D!
    Lindsey Avatar Catie Lindsey Date: 2/21/2014 7:22:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Is that a stuffed animal, Ruben? so funny. LOL all he is missing is a hat! :)
  1. Date: 2/21/2014 1:40:00 PM
    thank you Charles

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  1. Date: 2/21/2014 12:46:00 PM
    I enjoy trying to write a good Haiku, though most of my stuff probably falls into senryu, but I have been working on that :) Really it all comes down to the reader's interpretation of the words given their feelings in the moment it is read, we are all in the same time but not the same place.... our summer so bright/ our winters so cold and dark/ moment's opposed view

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    Henderson Avatar Charles Henderson Date: 2/21/2014 3:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes (my def) Senryu may be equated to the limerick as haiku to the sonnet.
    Henderson Avatar Charles Henderson Date: 2/21/2014 3:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Adam, re: your haiku. Is good haiku. Your line 1 and 2 so opposite no comma or conjunction needed after line 1, but do be careful of that or may come up with three separate statements. Haiku can only have 2 statements.
  1. Date: 2/21/2014 10:10:00 AM
    Haiku is always so tricky to do correctly and to make it meaningful.......so thank you Charles. As hard as it is for me when writing one, I am always in awe when I read one done well. Some people make it look so easy, and it is not. But reading a good one is such a pleasure!

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  1. Date: 2/21/2014 9:19:00 AM
    For me it is a challenge too. Though I see some people from which GOOD haiku seem to flow. What a talent to have!! My friend who owns ShadowPoetry is one of those who can write haiku like there is no tomorrow!

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  1. Date: 2/21/2014 1:49:00 AM
    Yes Catie in my opinion it is the hardest form to write which I have found. Good Rhyme and free verse are much easier, and I like the challenge, but of course you know what they say about opinions.

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  1. Date: 2/20/2014 11:47:00 PM
    i will work on one Charles. I just want to thank you for the reminders here in your blog, that i seem to toss aside when not focusing on haiku. But I do love haiku for several reasons, and I believe it is poetry, absolutely. love and hugs, Catie :)

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  1. Date: 2/20/2014 11:02:00 PM
    thank you for your comments, Giorgio.

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  1. Date: 2/20/2014 7:15:00 PM
    Yes Chas very clear and help full!

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  1. Date: 2/20/2014 3:57:00 PM
    Chas, this is a great blog, very informative...

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