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Cyndi MacMillan is a well-rounded writer who embraces many genres and forms. Her work has been published in local newspapers and has won contests. She enjoys reading literary journals, and she is actively pursuing publication within their glossy covers.

Verse is both magnetic and kinetic. She attempts - madly- to give equal attention to her poetry, short stories, and a novel-in-progress, the Trim of Wicks.  Regardless of genre, she focuses on language. One word has the power to repel or pull. She never forgets the reader and does her best to make their ride interesting.

Poetry soup is a good forum which enables people from around the world to share poetry. It has some great resources and provides a nice space for friends to meet.

Cyndi lives in a small town in Ontario with her husband, young daughter and far too many books.

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Sak Vid Pa Kanpe, ghostwritten... YO RUBEN!


Blog Posted:4/25/2013 12:10:00 AM


"Sak Vid Pa Kanpe"
By Ruben O


The only nation in the world
born of a valiant slave revolt.

The most brutal dark colony
today it's in mere agony.

But Virgine will never know it
Faint girl physically unfit

Baby and Papa Doc among
corruption, dictators, and dung.

Shoving to the sea... the future
dragging wounds without suture.

But Virgine will never know it
cause anemia made its slit.

Undersized for malnutrition.
she can't reach her own volition.

She can't drink clean drinking water
fetid diarrhea slaughters.

But Virgine will never know it
unconcerned tongues watch and spit

Her impoverished  mother's eyes
under the flood had lost her cries.

Her missed youth can carry luggage
and her shy "Mesi" accept bondage.

But her questions will not suffrage
illiterate wounds lack bandage

To "Etazini", her man sailed
his shipwreck and fears are still veiled

Unheard the endless pains and sighs
she sees the arrival of flies.

But Virgine will never know it
cause poverty digs her a pit




"Sak Vid Pa Kanpe" by ghostwriter

Haiti, built on the revolution of slaves,
an island of turmoil, battered by waves.

Dark is its past, an impoverished colony,
its present is as brutal, amassed agony.

Flung to the sea, an uncertain future,
old wounds reopen, can never be sutured.

Papa and Baby Doc, rulers horrifying,
lived lavishly while thousands were dying.

Corruption long reigned, fled from defeat,
as the poor trudged through filthy streets.

There lives Virgine, frail, almost resilient,
her face is the nation, weathered, defiant.

A child, naïve, she tries to believe,
but food is scarce and volunteers leave.

Small, malnutrition has altered her size,
but a story shimmers in her wide eyes.

Water is fetid, thirst leaves one wary
to the threat of typhus and dysentery.

So many things, Virgine will not know,
as the world looks away, despair will grow.

Her mother has suffered for too many years,
and the flood has dried the last of her tears.

Virgine carries luggage, tourists defile,
Slavery returns, whispers Mesi with a smile.

She has many questions, most are ignored,
illiteracy steals each answer she stores.

To Etazini, her father attempted to sail,
but the sea took him, young memory fails.

Her toy is an old spring, her friends are flies,
but she no longer hears unbearable sighs.

Though only five, Virgine won't live to know
nations stay unmoved, no mercy they show.





Okay, not worthy of a prize, but whatta ya think, Ruben? Do you like it? Did I capture what you wanted to capture? Did I butcher it?

Hugs to you brother from another mother!
MWAW


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  1. Date: 4/25/2013 9:48:00 PM
    This is my fav couplet: "Virgine carries luggage, tourists defile,/ Slavery returns, whispers Mesi with a smile. "

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    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 4/25/2013 9:56:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ... I can keep posting your couplets! LOL!
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 4/25/2013 9:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ... and this one: "A child, naïve, she tries to believe,/ but food is scarce and volunteers leave."
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 4/25/2013 9:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ... and this one: "Corruption long reigned, fled from defeat,/ as the poor trudged through filthy streets."
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 4/25/2013 9:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ... and this one: "She has many questions, most are ignored,/illiteracy steals each answer she stores."
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 1:24:00 PM
    Hi, Cyndi! Im in a hurry but i'll be back at night to point out the improvements. There are a couple of lines that really impresed me. You did a great job!

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    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 4/25/2013 8:31:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    No rush! Glad you liked it. My eyes are blurring, I'm so tired I feel sick. I'm off to bed chum... find time for you! Hugs
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 8:32:00 AM
    I can't wait to see what Ruben says' I think the poem was not meant to be traced... :-) however, I do love the last 5 set of couplets. xox~Linda

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    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 4/25/2013 8:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I guess I hope others will see this and think, hmmm, I can start fresh but keep the heart and DIRECTION of a poem, crumble that paper, but keep its SOUL. HUGS!
    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 4/25/2013 8:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    :) You are probably wondering, what is she about, now? I believe all writing is salvagable by keeping its intentions, heart, and tossing words to the wayside. I hope somebody "retraces" my burnt offerings, I want to see what they'd do! But the poet must be approached, this isn't everyone's flavour flave. :D
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 7:42:00 AM
    WOW! Cyndi, I am sure Ruben is very happy with what you have done. This is absolutely amazing. A very talented write indeed. You pulled at my heart strings. Thanks for the re-write...no offense Ruben : ) but I do think she could have used the dung line somehow hahaha!

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    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 4/25/2013 8:57:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    We'll see. I hope he likes it, if not I'll take the blog down immediately! I didn't post this as it still his, its essence, its breath. Dung became filthy and diarreah became dysentery. Tried to keep the story, just altered the words. Though yes, I gave a sucker punch ending.
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 12:18:00 AM
    You have done justice to the essence of the tale and had coloured it with salient facts, Cyndi. Love your rendition of Ruben's poem. You have yet again proven that you are a master at the art of interpreting and writing poetry. You certainly have a keen eye. Love, Su

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    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 4/25/2013 9:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    PS- I did the rerendering late late late last night - around 1 am. So this morning I tinkered with a few lines, especially the final couplet.
    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan Date: 4/25/2013 8:59:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Hon! I might ressurect my own Haiti poem and rewrite if for Debbie's contest, after all! I had no idea which poem to pick, lol, so many to choose that need a reworking. But Ruben's directed my attention to my own. Hugs!

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