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4/16/2016 12:58:51 PM
Lend Me Your Ear, Nightingale.	I've had this piece for over a year now but it still bothers me. I've revised it several times, and I would like another perspective on this one, since nobody comments on the regular page Lend me your ear, Nightingale. Procure me with a sing song tale. For my voice does often fail. Your voice made even Keats pine. For no words, nor thoughts, nor powers can curtail, your melody and pitch all too fine. Lend me your ear, fowl of the air Do not leave from here to there. For your insight I wish to be heir. In the east your tune made death delay. Do not resign to your treetop lair, Before the reaper can be held at bay. Lend me your ear, fledgling. Why for a human did you sing? For beings no more fickle can emotions swing. A rose, with you impaled on the thorn, Was rejected for jewels meant for a king. And for a pauper true love was never born. Lend me your ear, Chick beneficent For my mind is reminiscent. of you violated so innocent. In transformation you sung a lament, for chastity no longer persistent. And your justice Olympus did consent. Who may have more renown? Is there a king with his Crown? Or a bride in her gown? All of them in comparison pale, to the bird cloaked in brown. Now what did they see in you Nightingale?
7/4/2016 10:54:50 AM
Lend Me Your Ear, Nightingale.	I Very much appreciate your comment. I was waiting for somebody to give an honest critique
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