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3/25/2012 2:39:08 PM
Leanne Perks Posts: 2
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open to any comments and constructive critism. Thankyou
When it sinks in, you feel surely this is not happening to me, it cannot be real.
The feelings you try to hide and conceal until you learn to cope and deal with them. The anguish and deep pain from within yourself is causing you grief, wishing and searching for some hope and a relief.
Tears flow wishing it would make it all go away and return to good health again although fear and pain are the feelings that Saddly remain.
It crushes your soul fearing the worst and causing you great stress and worry along with the heartache and the damage it causes to your emotional health.
This is surely the worst feeling in the world that anyone could feel knowing that your life could fade away, nobody knowing the right words they could say to help take your pain and sorrow away and ease your restless and aching mind.
A True Companion you can find to express your feelings to someone who knows you best and who is caring,loving and most truly kind with a sympathetic ear to give some comfort to wipe away your anxious fears.
Unload your burdens you bare with a trusted friend to care and who will loyally support you and always be there for when there is distress and help heal your painful emotions to give you comfort, hope and rest to your troubled heart to mend the pieces as your feelings it releases. A True friend is to be Cherished right to the end.
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4/10/2012 5:28:32 PM
Diana Mohammed Posts: 3
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PoetricalRhymer87 wrote:
open to any comments and constructive critism. Thankyou
When it sinks in, you feel surely this is not happening to me, it cannot be real.
The feelings you try to hide and conceal until you learn to cope and deal with them. The anguish and deep pain from within yourself is causing you grief, wishing and searching for some hope and a relief.
Tears flow wishing it would make it all go away and return to good health again although fear and pain are the feelings that Saddly remain.
It crushes your soul fearing the worst and causing you great stress and worry along with the heartache and the damage it causes to your emotional health.
This is surely the worst feeling in the world that anyone could feel knowing that your life could fade away, nobody knowing the right words they could say to help take your pain and sorrow away and ease your restless and aching mind.
A True Companion you can find to express your feelings to someone who knows you best and who is caring,loving and most truly kind with a sympathetic ear to give some comfort to wipe away your anxious fears.
Unload your burdens you bare with a trusted friend to care and who will loyally support you and always be there for when there is distress and help heal your painful emotions to give you comfort, hope and rest to your troubled heart to mend the pieces as your feelings it releases. A True friend is to be Cherished right to the end.
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4/10/2012 5:34:56 PM
Diana Mohammed Posts: 3
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emotional and well thought..PoetricalRhymer87 wrote:
open to any comments and constructive critism. Thankyou
When it sinks in, you feel surely this is not happening to me, it cannot be real.
The feelings you try to hide and conceal until you learn to cope and deal with them. The anguish and deep pain from within yourself is causing you grief, wishing and searching for some hope and a relief.
Tears flow wishing it would make it all go away and return to good health again although fear and pain are the feelings that Saddly remain.
It crushes your soul fearing the worst and causing you great stress and worry along with the heartache and the damage it causes to your emotional health.
This is surely the worst feeling in the world that anyone could feel knowing that your life could fade away, nobody knowing the right words they could say to help take your pain and sorrow away and ease your restless and aching mind.
A True Companion you can find to express your feelings to someone who knows you best and who is caring,loving and most truly kind with a sympathetic ear to give some comfort to wipe away your anxious fears.
Unload your burdens you bare with a trusted friend to care and who will loyally support you and always be there for when there is distress and help heal your painful emotions to give you comfort, hope and rest to your troubled heart to mend the pieces as your feelings it releases. A True friend is to be Cherished right to the end.
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4/17/2012 3:15:48 PM
Mario Vitale Posts: 6
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Came to believe in a power greater then yourself. We live today among spoiled rotten brats, Then in return have raised their own wild brats! Their isn't any scope nor inclination of ethical persuasion Instead, our keen efforts have been geared toward the unethical In effect, with direct certainty this lapse in judgement has provoked some to tears An ever further sea of debauchary has replaced our ethical standard of norm Some even bother to curse the very day they were actually born? Questions to consider ?
-- Mario William Vitale
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