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Gone Forever

Here I sit amongst the long grasses and the reed,
in a solitary place, where my breath is freed,
on an Indian Summer's evening on the lake bed,
autumn has come, yet the warmth has not fled.

Blazing orange skies, are mirrored to reflect,
I cannot imagine a scene being any more perfect,
as I looked up, an unfallen leaf caught my gaze,
spotlighted in the sun's last golden rays.

I noticed this crimson leaf as it began to wave,
the end of a short life that I could not save,
then swept away suddenly by the wind's rake,
and ripples formed as it landed on the still lake.

The leaf was carried away and my eyes followed,
then drowned by the water's surface and swallowed,
windy fingertips tugged it from the branch to sever,
existing once, like today, and then was gone forever.








Note - This was my original idea for the poem "The leaf",
but it was revised for a contest. I just wanted to post both 
versions of the poem.



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  1. Date: 9/22/2014 3:41:00 AM

    Excellent. Beautiful write. Enjoyed. Tfs
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 10:22:00 PM

    Brilliant Kelly...love the "windy fingertips"...this poem feels like a still life portrait that moves ever so slowly...just wonderful
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 8:00:00 PM

    You amaze with the deep write my friend! This flows like a cool mountain stream into a crystal blue lake. "then swept away suddenly by the wind's rake, and ripples formed as it landed on the still lake." Golden verses ....
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 8:00:00 PM

    BRAVO!!!
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 5:59:00 PM

    You illustrate the transitory nature of reality in this work. Your leaf is a metaphor for life in this world. With the cool winds and falling leaves we can enjoy a respite before the depths of winter. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 1:52:00 PM

    Kelly you blew me away with this beauty. Exquisite talent you have for writing and this is a perfect example of that. Saving this one on my fav's. Wishing you a great weekend love. oxox Gail
  1. Date: 9/20/2014 5:17:00 AM

    Hi Kelly! I liked the 'contest' version, but I think that this one feels more natural when viewed from an expressive mood. I rated both with a 7, but I'll add plus to this one:) hugs // paul
  1. Date: 9/19/2014 9:36:00 PM

    Very nice Kiddo, I like it :)
  1. Date: 9/19/2014 7:27:00 PM

    My background is as a director. Specifically theatre. As such I love Shakespeare. I love it in this form. However it had a special meaning for me rewritten for the contest. Both versions are a great write. Thank you for two wonderful reads.
  1. Date: 9/19/2014 6:37:00 PM

    WOW!!!! PD

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