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The pointy end of a triangle

I loved a woman who loved two men.
She consumed me from the inside.
There are times I remember back then.
When she chose him it hurt my pride.

She consumed me from the inside.
I thought about her night and day.
When she chose him it hurt my pride.
It took all my courage to walk away.

I thought about her night and day.
A strange obsession that consumed my mind.
It took all my courage to walk away.
She baptized me in a love that made me blind.

A strange obsession that consumed my mind.
I deserved more than she was able to give.
She baptized me in a love that made me blind.
Now that the chains are gone I'm able to live.

I deserved more than she was able to give.
My moral compass helped me find the way.
Now the chains are gone I'm able to live.
Although she was amazing I could not be her slave.

My moral compass helped me find the way.
There are times I remember back then.
Although she was amazing I could not be her slave.
I loved a woman who loved two men.

Hi Debbie, I gave it a try. I like my other poem so
I am leaving that one as it was. Thanks for making
me think about the form.

Content inspired by Sarai Romani's poem "Morality is War"

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  1. Date: 4/15/2014 5:05:00 AM

    to be I meant
  1. Date: 4/15/2014 5:04:00 AM

    a triangle is always hard to deal with Rick we all want to the others exclusive love hugs
  1. Date: 4/9/2014 7:58:00 AM

    Been there a few times myself. Well, their loss...thankfully, and this is most important, you became stronger & wiser from it. Many "men" lose their identity when in a similar situation. Very nicely done!
  1. Date: 4/9/2014 7:47:00 AM

    I like the 'pointy end' theme. When you divide your attentions too many ways you lose focus entirely.
  1. Date: 4/8/2014 12:50:00 AM

    Part of growing up, I suppose:) nice write, dear Richard.
  1. Date: 4/7/2014 5:39:00 PM

    Good stuff Richard! Hope all is well with you..
  1. Date: 4/7/2014 5:24:00 PM

    Powerful words, expressed in a wonderful poetic way. Another great poem from you, Richard!
  1. Date: 4/7/2014 3:38:00 PM

    What a great Pantoum Richard...The hard part is getting over the obsession. We don't think we can live without that person in our lives but the reality is we are better off without them.
  1. Date: 4/7/2014 11:57:00 AM

    lovely christening of your new pantuom , richard!.. well expressed sentiments!.. huggs
  1. Date: 4/7/2014 11:48:00 AM

    She didn't deserve you....or the man in the poem....lovely write....as always
  1. Date: 4/7/2014 11:28:00 AM

    Hi there kiddo, yes this is a correct pattern ;) as you know the other verse had more heart BUT no one's Shakespeare first time out of the gate hey, I've heard it said Sjakespeare was actually more than one man ! LOL Light & Love
  1. Date: 4/7/2014 11:28:00 AM

    Fascinating read Richard loved the repetition of the lines - really powerfully constructed with an interesting lesson in morality. Hugs Jan x

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