Submit a Poem
Get Your Premium Membership
spacer

Read leaving Poems Online

NextLast
 
Written by: Tim Smith  Send Soup Mail    
Read Poems by Tim Smith

Eyes Wide Open

                             Open your eyes
                             And you will see
                         What all this negativity 
                             Has done to me

                            You have blinders on 
                           Running your own race
                             Why can't you see
                         What you have done to me

                           You might win the race
                               Have all the glory
                           Be smothered with roses
                              Be the lead story

                           What you have done
                              Makes no sense
                             You left us behind
                            To fend for ourselves

                            Don't open your eyes
                             We know you won't
                             Keep running away
                               We will be okay

                           Our eyes are open wide
                               We can surely see
                                 We will survive
                          We will chase our dreams

                                Go win your race
                          Find the answers you seek
                                 We will win ours
                            And are in a better place

NextLast

Comments

Please Login to post a comment


 
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 2:33:00 PM

    This is a great poem, Tim. I love the third stanza. It has a beautiful rhythm to it.
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 1:59:00 PM

    Yeah, so many of us have blinders on, we keep bumping into each other in our solo races without knowing the damage we inflict. Others think they have open eyes, but don't realize the myopic view of their own little world. Nice write. I will try to open my eyes to see more of them. Joe
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 1:16:00 PM

    Dear Tim, People who are blind to the needs and welfare of others get no sympathy from me. Keep moving forward beyond this loss because you truly are in a better place. You touched me deeply and I'm adding you to my favorite poets. Told a friend how impressed I was with your writing style. This is a stunning example of your talent! Love and blessings for a happy Easter, Carolyn
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 12:49:00 PM

    Great depiction of struggle and ultimate success. To many quit before reaching love's podium.
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 10:22:00 AM

    Aww Tim my sweet friend you mustn't let an uncaring unfeeling partner hurt you so because you are a real treasure darlin'. I like the positivity in your words that let's her know you'll do just fine without the drama and treatment from her. You keep on keepin' on hon'! Big country hugs to you Tim...:)
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 10:16:00 AM

    Enjoyed your work of optimism about whatever happens in life to look on the brighter side..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 9:35:00 AM

    unsinkable soul you got.. and you know what you want!.. this is a tremendous write, tim.. huggs
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 5:15:00 AM

    what a revelation at half end of the poem... liberating write. :) --olive_eloi :)
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 3:11:00 AM

    Tim, i like the ride, and your spirit, behind the words you talk. With eyes, open wide.... shut, open, exposed... a better place... enjoyed.. Linda
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 3:00:00 AM

    - Tim, it hurts my heart to read your words today. - A word that is said, and a stone is thrown, can never be recalled. - Powerful lines - well done my friend! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 1:52:00 AM

    Wow what a powerful rebuttal of the ingrate partner. In creative fab rhymin too. Nice to read u again.
  1. Date: 4/16/2014 12:02:00 AM

    A very nice write, Tim. You articulate so much with so few words; kudos! Thank you for reading my poem earlier; I appreciate it. See ya around campus. Peace and good fortune, Mel :)
  1. Date: 4/15/2014 9:43:00 PM

    Strong writing Tim!! I liked it very much. Negativity is not a part of my vocab. (anymore) I used to be that way. no more. You told a good story
  1. Date: 4/15/2014 9:14:00 PM

    a poem that said what you had to say, with an in your face attitude..strong words,strong write
  1. Date: 4/15/2014 6:49:00 PM

    what a great poem this is, as if written to someone not even worthy of your advice. btw, Muscatine, IA. is my hometown, not where I live now. I did not hear about the tornado. Lucky for me, I never saw one in my years there.
  1. Date: 4/15/2014 5:24:00 PM

    Oh Tim think so many people go around blinkered and negativity spreads. Excellent write as ever my friend. Hugs Jan xxxx

Back