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The Top Of The Family Tree

Top of the family tree Looking down on young life The future what is there? A chance or more chances To become more~improve The deceased press down hard Train up the children Teach the youth what's right Show them correct way Point them to the light Through hands of love guide The very top Now there's freedom No! Now first comes Obligation Tenderness Gentleness Listening Ever Love~Guide Now!
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  1. Date: 4/22/2014 5:40:00 PM

    Well portrayed intentions Sara, such a lot of pitfalls out there, In my book kids lives and direction come 1st..' take care Joe))
  1. Date: 4/21/2014 4:36:00 PM

    yes, such words of wisdom here, Sara
  1. Date: 4/20/2014 12:00:00 AM

    This is a form that is difficult to construct without sound contrived or forced. Good job. I'm not sure I'd even care to attempt it, so you'll get all my referrals.
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 11:57:00 PM

    I really enjoyed this creative write!
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 9:17:00 PM

    Good one, Sara. NOW is what we should always be focused on. I know your love of family is strong!
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 9:16:00 PM

    i have been trying to trace my family tree and have found relatives in italy on facebook now... love the way you did this poem Sara...interesting write :) Hugs
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 6:16:00 PM

    Lovely write Sara, especially the end three lines. loved it.....Peter
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 6:04:00 PM

    I like it Sara!
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 5:26:00 PM

    Interesting start, let me know when it is finished. I always think of the decendants as the roots of the tree that allow the children to branch out and reach to the sky.
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 11:20:00 AM

    Some nice sentiments expressed here Sara..Happy Easter!
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 10:56:00 AM

    Thank you Sara for your recnt comment on my endeavours.rgds Brian
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 7:28:00 AM

    Beautiful Sara. The first five lines give so much hope. But then the last line -- a burden of a failed history? I think it reads well as it is. When you finish it, are you going to develop the last line? I can't wait to read your complete vision. Peace...Sam
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 7:03:00 AM

    It read well from the start. I'm with Dave...looking forward tp the rest.
  1. Date: 4/19/2014 6:15:00 AM

    Sara, you're on to something here.. Can't wait to see your finished work

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