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Water Brothers

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Water Brothers

"Brightly, brightly, and with Beauty",
quoted Mr. Valentine.
In fullness Grok; to cherish, flock-
this Ghost of Yours and Mine.

I've decided to discorporate
at this friendly hour.
Water Brothers, don't hesitate-
I am yours to devour!

*Homage to "Stranger in a Strange Land". If you've never read the book, this poem will 
be quite difficult to understand, I'm afraid.

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  1. Date: 3/12/2014 7:51:00 PM

    Fantastic work here Archaic. I never read the book but I love the feelings felt when I perused this one. It will be added to my favorites from you. Keep smiling my friend until next time we meet again. But for now I'm off again. Keep well okay : ) Adieu

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 3/13/2014 11:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Great to see you, friend Mustapha! You have been sorely missed; thanks for dropping in on me. I always appreciate when you stop by and thank you for the warm compliments :)
  1. Date: 1/23/2014 10:41:00 PM

    Great poem Chan, and I definitely Grok, having read this Heinlein years ago. This is poetry of a high order.

    Peterson Avatar Mark Peterson Date: 1/24/2014 9:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes, you increased my appetite.
    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 1/24/2014 7:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I'm glad "cannibalism" can be considered "high order" lol. Most people will not grok that that's what the poem is essentially about, in the Martian custom, of course. Thanks for the review, Mark :)
  1. Date: 1/23/2014 11:56:00 AM

    No, I don't need to read "Strangers in a Strange Land" (I have not read it) to understand this poem. Although the ending lines of each stanzas took me unaware, my mind flew away and returned satisfied.I really like it, Archaic.

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 1/23/2014 4:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    lol I didn't say "impossible" to understand, Ruben; just difficult. Some people are more astute than others. Glad you enjoyed it nonetheless and appreciate the read and reply, my friend :)
  1. Date: 1/23/2014 11:43:00 AM

    Good; so I haven't just totally lost it as I was thinking! ;) Bout time you came back! Hi Chan

    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet Date: 1/23/2014 4:31:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey, FJ! Thanks for stopping by, hon. Will write you a message soon ;) Thank you too, Ruben! :)
    Thomas Avatar F. J. Thomas Date: 1/23/2014 12:15:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    LOL Ruben!! The bad thing is...I see how you got it. lol
    O. Avatar Ruben O. Date: 1/23/2014 12:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    LOL. In my case, and before reading the footnote, I associated "Mr. Valentine" with its connotation of love and romance ... so "the ghost" was this feeling. Then "I'm yours to devour" ... well, don't ask. : D Am I in trouble? Do I need help? : D