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A Villanelle for a Villian

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A Villanelle for a Villian

Was I not too young, tell me truly, speak 
the dew of life was still upon my face,
when I refused to take that final leap        

to loose my life when not yet at its peak. 
I took a deathly kiss in his embrace.
Was I not to young, tell me truly, speak? 

Unwise, unwise was I, or simply meek
how I mortally erred was a disgrace,
when I refused to take that final leap.      

No life was this, no haven for the weak
eternal, soulless, hell no resting place.
Was I not too young, tell me truly, speak? 

Existence now bares a fetid reek
I've replaced the grace of heaven chaste, 
when I refused to take that final leap.

I face the nightmares now, hear the shrieks,  
ah, remember there was dew on my face.
Was I not too young, tell me truly, speak
when I refused to take that final leap. 

Contest: Poems from the Vampire! 
Poet: Debbie Guzzi

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  1. Date: 4/17/2014 6:48:00 AM

    I'm not a fan of repetitive forms, debbie, but this is an extremely well written one all the same (in fact I'm planning a future contest for all repetitive forms that annoy me! lol) I'm seeing some terrific poems for this contest down in the HMs - congrats! :)

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 6:12:00 PM


  1. Date: 4/15/2014 7:17:00 AM

    Enjoyed your Dracula poem Debbie congratulations on your win, I'm reading all the scary entries as I watch the snow fall from window, yep snow in April, yuk! Hope all is well luv xxx

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 6:15:00 AM

    A very skillful villanelle, despite the villain. Cheers Debbie.

  1. Date: 4/15/2014 2:59:00 AM

    Lovely flowing villanelle; kept the tempo up to the end. // congrats on win. // paul

  1. Date: 12/19/2013 7:54:00 AM

    This seems to be a difficult form... but you've done a masterly job!!! Terry

  1. Date: 12/12/2013 7:26:00 PM

    Duh the Quatern the form I used. I couldn't resist that one, after reading your previous remark to Richard's comment. Thanks for your comment and yes after reading from the vampire, that was my second guess, but I wasn't exactly sure what the Vampire was.

  1. Date: 12/12/2013 7:13:00 PM

    I almost felt the title was directed at me lol. Since I once dubbed myself the Villain of the Villanelle, of course it was in humor. I really like this form, like vampire material, for not so obvious reasons, well maybe obvious in my work. I digressed, great work, and I guess a belated congratulations.

    bunch Avatar wayland bunch Date: 12/12/2013 7:15:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Was the final leap marriage? I would probably say not, but it seems so logical throughout, I guess I need to find out what the Vampire is. Terrible not doing my research, but was going to read some of your work and couldn't resist this one.
  1. Date: 12/10/2013 1:55:00 PM

    Debbie...I've missed you. Thought I'd pop by and read something and leave a post. Wow. Congrats on your win! I have never tried this form. It seems like a challenge, but you made it lovely....even with this challenging topic! :) Hope all is well....Hugs!!!

  1. Date: 12/8/2013 4:29:00 PM

    wow, Debs, great job here. SEems like i just can't keep up these days with all the poets I have gotten to know. Congrats on your well deserved win.

  1. Date: 12/8/2013 7:02:00 AM

    Congratulations on you win oh cool lady xx

  1. Date: 12/7/2013 9:13:00 PM

    Well done. Original and very creative. Congrats :)

  1. Date: 12/7/2013 6:26:00 PM

    Oh, congratulations on your win, Debs! :) Masterful with these diverse forms, accomplished because it captivates the reader. Enjoyed reading this. Keep well, Mikki

  1. Date: 12/7/2013 4:45:00 AM

    Congrats on the win, dEB

  1. Date: 12/6/2013 6:40:00 PM

    I marvel that you attempted (successfully) this rhyme structure. It flows so well and gave me something to savor. Congratulations.

    Guzzi Avatar Debbie Guzzi Date: 12/6/2013 7:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much Mark! There's little worse than hind sight aye?
  1. Date: 12/6/2013 4:32:00 PM

    congrats on a fine win Debbie

  1. Date: 12/5/2013 9:04:00 AM

    That 2nd to last stanza hit HARD for me. LOVE IT! Wonderful job!

  1. Date: 12/2/2013 6:43:00 PM

    I really love this poem, Debbie! I can feel the deep pain and the sorrow of immortality, from the vampire's perspective. An amazing piece of poetry! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!...Thank you so much for the wonderful comments. I really do appreciate it!

  1. Date: 11/28/2013 9:54:00 AM

    This is awesome --what more can I say. love phyl

  1. Date: 11/27/2013 3:02:00 AM

    I love that image of dew on your face. Fantastic. A lovely flowing poem, done in a form who's definition I'm not sure I understand. Well done.

    thirtyseven Avatar scott thirtyseven Date: 11/27/2013 3:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh and for the Vampire competition, I wish you all the best. I'm in awe.
  1. Date: 11/27/2013 2:15:00 AM

    Debbie, this is a great witness to prove that you are "so young in heart and mind" ha ha ha ...(: ) Jenish.

  1. Date: 11/26/2013 9:16:00 PM

    awesome poem Deb in a great form... I know they are not easy to do and you did a great job with it...good luck in the contest!

  1. Date: 11/26/2013 3:22:00 PM

    Cool poem Deb! Thanks for stopping by!

  1. Date: 11/26/2013 3:09:00 PM

    Very clever Deborah--and I love this form!

  1. Date: 11/26/2013 10:30:00 AM

    Deb, this one has winner written all over it..It has great flow and rhythm to it..I am glad that I chose it as one that I would read today..Sara