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Remnants

I walk along a shore 
                 far inland from the roar  
                            of two great oceans, 
the Pacific to my west, 
        and much farther away,  
                                                        the Atlantic to my east.  

Here is desert land          and a foul-smelling, shrinking lake.  
Salt retention - the lake's peculiar claim to fame - 
attracts the curious few 
      who test the brackish waters to see if, 
             floating on their backs,  they really won't sink.  
Some tread far                                 out toward the horizon, 
salt stinging and painting their legs white. 

 Here now, alone with the sun and resident gulls, 
                I own this stretch of sand.  
Arid heat creates a desire in me
             to wade into the coolness of the water, 
but nearing pea-green scum, I opt for staying dry.

Suddenly, 
            a small wave appears, 
and with it,                     a splash of water on my legs. 

  
I close my eyes. 
                    For a moment, I'm the wisp of a cloud 
                    drifting above a cool lake big as a sea, 
                      mirroring the azure of sky long ago-
                               so long ago, in fact-
that I imagine this land right now 
                         -with its few creature inhabitants-
                                   has little resemblance to what was here before. 

I ponder what it could have been like
               those many centuries before,       but I cannot.
 Alas, I know very little of science or
     of how exactly this area   looked     or felt     or smelled 
                                   once upon a time 
                                       when it was more water than land. 
I know only this:
              today it is we                 that remain. . . 

I open my eyes, 
conscious again of the remnant water's stench,
and walk to my car, 
                 anticipating my drive back to the city,
                           with the top down
                                     and hot wind in my face.


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  1. Date: 12/13/2013 10:50:00 AM
    A great poem of imagination beautifully pictured. Sorry, am was busy. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 12/10/2013 2:31:00 PM
    I love this moment, Andrea. This is the stuff I've been missing. "today it is we...that remain..." Love that!

  1. Date: 11/20/2013 8:14:00 PM
    Andrea, another lovely win... Can't believe I missed so many contests.... xox..Linda

  1. Date: 11/18/2013 9:52:00 PM
    Congratulations Andrea....this deserved a wonderful win...and more...

  1. Date: 11/17/2013 10:45:00 PM
    Congrats for an aweinspiring beach muse! Andrea dis makes me tink, did humans hav to do sth with d polluting smell n changes. They do litter d indian ocean here where i live. Then sewage pipes too empty into d ocean. Ah ! I know d seas in paradise wud b unpoluted since God wud make them perfect there eh. Warmest wishes.

  1. Date: 11/17/2013 2:04:00 PM
    It's funny what triggers the mind to wonder how it was. When days before we all were born, was it the land of oz? Enjoyed your day trip Andrea. Peace. :)

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 7:35:00 PM
    Andrea, It's difficult to put into words how well crafted this is. Just drove by that lake this weekend. I'm in SLC again. You captured the history and the reality and the *stench* perfectly. Way to go :)

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 11:28:00 AM
    amazing free verse Andrea, no i am not surprised,,,

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 5:31:00 AM
    Aha! So this was for Charlotte's contest too...As I said below, I think this is one of your best, and that's saying something for sure...I know the convertable you refer too because I saw a picture of you in it on FB...do you still have it? Congrats my friend! - Tim

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    Date: 11/16/2013 5:34:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    If I'm not mistaken, there are no fish in that lake either because of the high salt content...
  1. Date: 11/15/2013 9:08:00 PM
    congrats on your win Andrea

  1. Date: 11/15/2013 7:37:00 PM
    See I told you it WAS stunning! Congrad's on your win Light & Love

  1. Date: 11/15/2013 5:57:00 PM
    andrea, this was an unusual piece from you, and it really painted a vivid picture of this place for me; I enjoyed the introspection and also the experimental line spacing you used to emphasize your words - congrats on your win in my contest! :)

  1. Date: 11/15/2013 5:34:00 PM
    Ahhh........how did I miss this one?? The sense of melancholia is evident in every line......wonderful poem, Andrea!

  1. Date: 11/14/2013 7:32:00 AM
    Love the scene Andrea--you pull the reader into the day!

  1. Date: 11/14/2013 6:22:00 AM
    777777777s! Your images are brilliant and so clear. I could imagine standing there with you. A WOW poem.

  1. Date: 11/13/2013 9:10:00 PM
    A stunning write from start to finish Petal. wondering what was, how the imagination can taunt us when we only have the remnants to bear witness. Superb. Take care, Richard

  1. Date: 11/13/2013 7:52:00 PM
    very precious moments of reflection in this poem Andrea....I enjoyed the read....hugs

  1. Date: 11/13/2013 9:06:00 AM
    Love the imagery. Have you seen Spiral Jetty, a major work of 20th Century sculpture? http://www.robertsmithson.com/earthworks/spiral_jetty.htm Jack

  1. Date: 11/13/2013 1:25:00 AM
    Good images tangy images from your salt lake excursion Andrea, thank you for your kind remarks on my latest write I may post some more; but at the moment i feel not inclined to much.' will try and catch up on some of your writes..Keep well Joe..)

  1. Date: 11/12/2013 11:26:00 PM
    Andrea, I don't know about that hot wind in my face... enjoyed the memory.... and thank you for enjoying my win,,,that was cool of Craig.... Wrote a new poem, with Kelly... hope you like it.."Atlantis". haha,,, I needed help, and she did great in helping me push my pen... stop by when you have time..Hugs.. Linda...

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