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© G.V. 29-10-2013 All rights reserved
© G.V. 01-03-2012
(Iambic Pentameter)

Sponsor: Charlotte Puddifoot
Contest Name: Any Subject, Any Form
Placement: 2nd

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Laughing Moon

Laughing Moon

Our seaward route defines the night's faint trust;
recites untruths, upon the waters' wakes;
the brines transmit inside the breeze my past,
with demons transferring the moon's mistakes.

They are my ocean pals! From dark sea depths,
they jump and dance strange vested like buffoons,
and hold a violin or brass trumpet,
to gallivant around with looney tunes.

The stars, above, elusive, send their spark,
my pals embark night's boats with wooden laughs,
discerning critics of our ghostly barque,
where waxen maids regale on moon's behalf.

Some lovely group! Night's theater folklore,
with drunk musicians and chords distuned,
who awkward smile with swollen lips to yore,
in front of a half-hidden laughing moon.

They sing for me! Hoarse sounds, guitar slack strings,
brass horns, vociferous trombones and lyres;
my joker pals through airy jumps, they sing,
transmitting brassy, foolish laughs and tears.

And dancing they absorb my stare and thought, 
(with anchor amulets that cables hold)
away they glide with sea-sung prayers besought
upon magnificent of seas, they voyage bold.

Saluting me, a dancer higher jumps
('mid pandemonium tunes - on island delf!)
while laughingly the chorus plays paeans,
avaunt he sails resembling myself.

© 01-03-2012, G. Venetopoulos
(Iambic Pentameter)

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  1. Date: 1/23/2014 2:24:00 AM
    Giorgio- ty for your amazing comments on my work- also, as I progress in my own personal writing, I am learning I cannot do so constructively, unless I read others work. Currently, I am studying the various forms of poetry. Thank you for the chance to read in "iambic pentameter", your dancing words, and for allowing me to envision your sitting with pencil & paper! Wendy~

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    Date: 1/23/2014 9:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wendy: Thank you for your kind words. Read my poems! They may contain minor flaws here and there, but still they are good metrical reads. I appreciate your honest and diligent remarks! Giorgio
  1. Date: 11/8/2013 7:59:00 AM
    Hi Giorgio, a well deserved second place win. Congrats!!!!

  1. Date: 11/7/2013 12:08:00 PM
    Hi Giorgio, congrats on your win * HUGS & LOVE <3 ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 7:03:00 PM
    Giorgio, a beautiful sail & imagery of you... CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WINNING POEM!!! awesome :) LUv~ LINDA

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 4:20:00 PM
    love the allusion to the nursery rhyme and how you mentioned all the items of dance and music toward the end. The last three stanzas were my favorites.

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 11:59:00 AM
    Magnificent imagery worthy of the highest of awards. Congratulations, Giorgio..... Jake

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 11:16:00 AM
    another feather in your cap, G.. sensational.. congrats on your winning slot!..:) huggs

  1. Date: 11/6/2013 8:11:00 AM
    Congrats on your fine win!!

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 11:26:00 PM
    Congrads on your win

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 8:40:00 PM
    Great job, Giorgio. Congrats!

  1. Date: 11/5/2013 4:51:00 PM
    fantastic use of language; a very well written piece - congrats! :)

  1. Date: 11/4/2013 3:16:00 PM
    A very creative write, with wonderful imagery! A fantastic poem, Giorgio, I thoroughly enjoyed it!

  1. Date: 11/3/2013 10:13:00 PM
    Deep write Giorgio...creative, great ending....

  1. Date: 10/31/2013 7:14:00 AM
    Yes you do remind me of the moon, splendid, reflecting, and beautiful, you're poetry is ethereal with a dreamy quality, it is no contest, you're work is of high quality, and always good for my soul. xxx

  1. Date: 10/30/2013 5:44:00 PM
    I really enjoyed reading your creative magnificent poem Giorgio..Looking forward for your next : ) Charma

  1. Date: 10/30/2013 5:29:00 AM
    What a joy of dancing with joy, Giorgio

  1. Date: 10/29/2013 6:37:00 PM
    I was bobbing up and down with the tide whilst reading this polished piece. Lovely line and strong metaphor in "with drunk musicians and chords distuned". A clever and witty write, Giorgio. You're sure to bag the top prize with this one. Good luck, my friend. Licia :-)

  1. Date: 10/29/2013 12:19:00 PM
    the pleasure of song and dance mystifies, G... what a festive mood; a joy to read!..:) huggs