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  1. Date: 2/23/2014 8:31:00 AM
    Amazing alliteration!!! A bit of a tounge twister. But the rhythm is awesome. I certainly would read it three times quickly! :D Great write!!

  1. Date: 1/14/2014 5:20:00 AM
    Wooooow very nice rhythm here!

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  1. Date: 1/8/2014 11:13:00 AM
    How well you move between the various types of poetry. You have encouraged me to move more out of my comfort zone.

  1. Date: 1/2/2014 8:57:00 PM
    Awesome alliteration.... ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 12/28/2013 3:16:00 PM
    Sorry a sad write here, interesting. cheri

  1. Date: 12/24/2013 12:09:00 AM
    wishing you a nice X-MASS

  1. Date: 12/23/2013 10:26:00 PM
    Hi, there, David. It's always so good to hear from you. You said you have published. Is it because of the poems being published that you can't put more here for new ones? I think of you from time to time and wonder how your family is doing now. Please let me know by email one day. Merry Christmas to you and your family.

  1. Date: 12/23/2013 6:44:00 PM
    You must write and tell me about your book publishing Merry Christmas, Light & Love

  1. Date: 12/19/2013 8:38:00 AM
    David....My smile salutes you!! 7 fun stars Merry Christmas, chuck

  1. Date: 12/18/2013 1:20:00 PM
    Great one, David : ) Always, Laura

  1. Date: 12/18/2013 6:47:00 AM
    Oh my what a tongue blister I got from reading this, you sure know how to get my tongue rolling, lol such joy to see you on my page, David, how have you been? xxx

  1. Date: 12/17/2013 3:38:00 PM
    David, it was SO good to see you at one of my poems today. I have been thinking of you and sometimes I pray that your family is well. Please let me know how things are going these days, ok? and PLEASE let's see you writing again!!!

  1. Date: 12/15/2013 6:32:00 PM
    wowsher that's a tongue twister! LOL how are you and yours doing? The grounds covered with ice crusted snow here. Happy Holidays! Light & Love

  1. Date: 11/25/2013 1:27:00 PM
    Hj David so glad I am to be back and what a great tongue twister this is then I would expect nothing less, all the best my friend Poetowen

  1. Date: 11/21/2013 6:04:00 AM
    hahaha.. what a fun tongue twister, David.

  1. Date: 11/3/2013 2:10:00 PM
    Hello David, i want you to know Alliteration, is my newest favorite form. Well i read this one 3 times... and i had fun... I don't know why,but I feel as if we should have a tongue twister form... it.. TEX

  1. Date: 11/1/2013 11:51:00 AM
    Hey Bro....this tongue twister is adorable and would make for a great children's book. Hope all is well. Hugs

  1. Date: 10/29/2013 9:16:00 PM
    A lovely poetic story with a sad ending for the little fellow, but a happy ending for the foul. (smile) So happy to see you posting again and I hope you and all are well?

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 1:32:00 PM
    lol, love this fun write - well, not fun for that slippery slippery snail. Great to see you back here, my friend - I hope you and your family are well