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  1. Date: 1/23/2014 12:15:00 PM

    Waltzing and enjoying the grace, all over again... Munch, munch, taking a giant bite out of life... Linda

  1. Date: 1/7/2014 12:47:00 PM

    Yasmin: Congrats on the nice poem and win! G.

  1. Date: 1/7/2014 11:11:00 AM

    Hello Sweet Yasmin, impressive and enjoying this one again..., thank you for everything, Congrats for the well deserved win...always~ Linda

  1. Date: 11/16/2013 2:40:00 PM

    Way to go with this winning work..Great job..Congrats on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 11/15/2013 11:07:00 AM

    Yasmin, Congratulations, on your 'Take the Leap' win............ LOVE ~ SKAT ~

  1. Date: 11/13/2013 12:26:00 PM

    Lovely ghazal, you have taken us on a journey with it, very beautiful, congratulations on your win.

  1. Date: 11/12/2013 7:01:00 AM

    Wow, nine couplets that flow perfectly!! Great win Yasmin!

  1. Date: 11/12/2013 3:04:00 AM

    Congratulations on the win, Yasmin

  1. Date: 11/11/2013 7:57:00 PM

    your images are stellar in this lovely piece...great job with this form....and congrats on the win :)

  1. Date: 10/16/2013 5:33:00 PM

    corrections or not,, did not effect this wonderful poetry,, truly awesome...

  1. Date: 10/12/2013 1:01:00 PM

    Yas, Yas, Yas, yes , yes, yes, this is a remarkable journey of energy and very thoughtful imagery, I think it epitomises your talent and if it is a contest it should glide gracefully to the top, very well done....wonderful to read your work again...David

  1. Date: 10/11/2013 7:36:00 AM

    Oh how I have missed your poetry, reading this is a reminder of you're lovely soul, this form seems quiet difficult Yasmin, but you did it with such grace, it reads nicely to me, excellent entry, sending my love and peaceful thoughts, have a blessed day my Princess, xxx

  1. Date: 10/11/2013 4:05:00 AM

    - I read Debbie's comment ..... I was warm in my head ..... lol ... hard / and a lot of work in this poem, Yasmin! - In my eyes and ears is just beautiful! - You have a good teacher, always helpful :))) - Wish you a nice and lovely day, dear friend. (I also have a new poem.))) - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 9:54:00 PM

    Yamin, not sure if this follows form but my it flows with such beautiful lines. I have read it three times and cannot get enough! Simply lovely...love and blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 6:57:00 PM

    Yasmin, I enjoyed reading your poem! Best of luck to you....Julie :-)

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 4:36:00 PM

    I'm getting confused reading what Debs is saying to you. I need to go back to the one single ghazal I wrote a few years ago to see how I did it. did you try to revise it already by what Debs said or is this the finished product after Debbie helped you? I just can't remember this type of form very well. Anyway, I LOVE your title and how you showed it in each line. It takes a sweetie like you to write about delicate grace.

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 1:51:00 PM

    Yassie monorhyme doesn't mean 1 syllable, it means all the a's rhyme ex: [a,a/ b,a/ c,a / d,a/ e,a] okies now I'll use words [glides/slides, creature/abides, antelope/presides, stance/outsides etc.] okies hon? get it? all the a's are the same rhyming sound b,c,d,e have NO rhyming partner.. L & L ;)

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 8:52:00 AM

    the three most important things are 1. the repeating word or phrase [WITH DELICATE GRACE be at the end of BOTH lines 1 & 2 then 4,6,8,10 etc] OKIES GOOD! 2. that the word before that rhymes in both 1&2, then 4,6,8,10 etc - its monorhyme-cat / bat / hat / that HAVE TO FIX THIS

    Guzzi Avatar Debbie Guzzi Date: 10/10/2013 8:53:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    fix 2 & THEN WE WILL THINK ON #3. That you TRY to have each couplet read like a proverb, a single unit, a stand alone poem .. hope that helps hon - L & L
  1. Date: 10/10/2013 7:23:00 AM

    This is a wondrous and an amazing write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this incredible poem this morning! What a terrific piece, quite the magnificent poem, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 10/10/2013 6:05:00 AM

    Kya Baat he, Yasmin, Dubara, Dubara