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Hammer to a Concrete Heart

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Hammer to a Concrete Heart

I did not write for many years;
Nay! I ne'er penned a verse!
I was too consumed by fears:
The kind that cripple first...
Ev'ry thought was coarse- was terse!
A concrete Heart about to burst!-
Devoured by Dragons when I fell off the wagon-
Please, stop reading, and call me a hearse!

*"Writing" Contest Entry*

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  1. Date: 8/14/2014 6:19:00 PM
    Nice pen Archaic... congrats on your big win! Verlena

  1. Date: 8/14/2014 6:11:00 PM
    A thought many experience, well done on your win ;)

  1. Date: 8/12/2014 7:37:00 AM
    Brilliant n unique is ur write my friend, congrats on big win!

  1. Date: 8/12/2014 7:36:00 AM
    Brilliant n unique is ur write my friend, congrats on big win!

  1. Date: 8/12/2014 7:11:00 AM
    unique take on the theme and I love the title:-) many congrats. Hugs jan xxx

  1. Date: 8/12/2014 6:33:00 AM
    - Congratulations on your winning poem in the contest: "Writing" - sponsored by: Regina Riddle - Really deserved, JTAPoet ! -oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 8/12/2014 5:02:00 AM
    Quite a unique approach to the theme of the contest, JTAP

  1. Date: 9/27/2013 1:54:00 PM
    A heart of concrete is hard to break with a hammer! An interesting and unique verse that you have penned here. I am so glad that you kept on writing! Great work!...I have a new poem that I think you might enjoy, it is titled, "To Be Or Not To Be".

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    Date: 9/28/2013 9:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Kelly. You picked up on the intended irony of the title: a hammer is pretty useless against concrete, hence no hope of breaking it open. I thought in the last line it would be fun to actually address and engage the reader; not sure if it helps or hinders the piece. I will check out your poem very soon! :)
  1. Date: 9/25/2013 9:38:00 PM
    evry1 goes through tis hw 1 copes wit it shows d character of d person... ~V~

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    Date: 9/26/2013 7:31:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I shouldn't have said that, Vin; I apologize. I should appreciate each and every review of my work, no matter how someone chooses to format their words. That was a shitty thing for to say and I'm sorry. I was in a bad mood last night and was needlessly rude to you. Hope you can forgive me :)
    That Archaic Poet Avatar Just That Archaic Poet
    Date: 9/25/2013 9:48:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for taking time to read and respond to my poem; however, I don't feign to comprehend typing in an abbreviated manner. It's off-putting.
  1. Date: 9/24/2013 8:17:00 AM
    pretty cool poem glad you got over your fears and are writing ~always pd

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    Date: 9/24/2013 8:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I appreciate that; thank you, PD :)