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Surreal Nature

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Surreal Nature

I sat beneath an oak tree, listening to the wind blowing through the branches. The storm was coming, I watched as the sky darkened. My previously sunny day transformed, the sun being blocked by the clouds. The shadows stretching across the horizon reaching across the water in my direction. Waves rising and crashing along the shore. Then all went silent, a calm translucent light filling the air. Yet there was no calmness within me, no peace just a feeling of dread. Thunder cracked breaking the silence, shaking the ground beneath me.

Bright light
devoid of warmth
flashing across sky
squirrel runs along branch

Rain is released, a waterfall from the sky. It bounces upward off the ground. Sheets of water form, joining and extending the lakes reach. The sound is deafening, pounding filling my ears. I witness yet I am not touched. Protected, dry, comforted.

Canopy of leaves
dry ground covered with moss
a single drop falls



Written September 20th 2013

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  1. Date: 10/25/2013 5:06:00 PM
    Creatively written..Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 1:09:00 PM
    I am sorry I have been out of the loop for so long, I hope I can back into sync soon but many congratulations on your win Richard xx

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 10:42:00 AM
    Good day Richard, CONGRATS , awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 9:51:00 AM
    Richard, a nice lovely win.. always~ LINDA

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 9:34:00 AM
    Thanks so much to all of you!

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 5:23:00 AM
    Beautiful imagery...congrats on win ^_^ Y.L.N

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 4:56:00 AM
    Congrats on the win in the contest, Richard

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 8:44:00 PM
    Richard---Such a well-penned haibun and many congrats on your win! Julie :-)

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 8:27:00 PM
    Such an honor to share this place.....this is wonderful and so descriptive.....I loved this scene! (great haiku too!)

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 7:52:00 PM
    this is gorgeous Richard...congrats on your awesome win :)

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 6:26:00 PM
    Richard beautifully expressed congrats on fine win Shadow x smile

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 5:28:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win, Richard... Jack

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 10/24/2013 5:56:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Jack.
  1. Date: 10/24/2013 5:06:00 PM
    I like to get lost in your story Richard, enjoyed your verse, congrats on your winning spot love xxx

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 10/24/2013 5:56:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks a bunch Rose.
  1. Date: 9/29/2013 5:12:00 PM
    Surreal by nature, fits you to a tee Rick, nuff said. Take care, Richard

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 10/24/2013 5:57:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Richie Rich.
  1. Date: 9/23/2013 2:07:00 AM
    Awesome descriptions.... loved it!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 9/23/2013 7:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks again Bindu
  1. Date: 9/22/2013 6:00:00 AM
    Masterful depiction of a storm. I love storms and rain, and I felt like I was there experiencing it.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 9/22/2013 6:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks again Monterey.
  1. Date: 9/21/2013 4:31:00 PM
    Great descriptions; very visual. The final haiku is my favorite... Jack

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 9/22/2013 6:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Jack
  1. Date: 9/21/2013 12:49:00 AM
    wow, Richard. how I hope to be so inspired to do one as good as this one. I LOVE it. The final haiku is awesome.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 9/21/2013 8:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Andrea, haiku is still a form that baffles me.
  1. Date: 9/20/2013 9:36:00 AM
    Yes, the power of rain and the hearts that keep it sound. An entrancing writing.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 9/21/2013 8:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Drake
  1. Date: 9/20/2013 9:13:00 AM
    Wonderful as always. ..nature will always side with you...ur a poet...:) Cheers !

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 9/21/2013 8:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I will depend on God as nature can be to unpredictable.
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