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Broken Wings

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Broken Wings

A newborn butterfly just broke out of her cocoon shell.
She spread her orange and black wings
and attempted her first flight.
She not only flew, she soared through the heavens.
The sunlight gave her warmth that she had never known before.

Little did she know, that this feeling would not last.
This monarch would cross paths with an uncaring, ravenous bird.
It grasped the butterfly in it's claws,
and with the bird's hungry beak, it tore the precious wings from the monarch.
A bird doesn't care who it hurts,
as long as it satisfies them.

The butterfly was delirious, from the pain and the shock.
Her beautiful wings were taken away.
She could no longer fly amongst the warm sunlight.
She now only knows the despair and the darkness that she used to be.
Now that monarch has become a caterpillar.
And, death has become her cocoon.

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  1. Date: 4/16/2014 6:21:00 PM

    Congrats on your win. An entomological note, Monarchs are generally avoided by birds as they taste terrible because of the Milkweed plant the larvae feed upon exclusively. There is a mimic species (Viceroy) which does not taste so bad but birds avoid because they imitate Monarchs. There are mathematical models of the relative % of each species maximizes survival of both. this Monarchs passing may benefit the species as the bird may well avoid them in the future. May be a poem here.

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 6:03:00 PM

    Congratulations on your first place win in PD's contest love. This poem is beautiful. Hugs and love Gail

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 12:55:00 PM

    Hi Kelly, Congrats on your win. Expressive and well told story. All the best. Theresa xx

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 11:47:00 AM

    Nature can be cruel and you tell it so well. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 11:02:00 AM

    Very poignant ending ..congrats on the win

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 9:38:00 AM

    Happy to see you on the winner's list. Congrats, kelly

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 9:20:00 AM

    Beautiful poem Kelly. Reminds me of the many young people who are abused of by predators in real life. // congrats on fine win. // paul

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 7:57:00 AM

    tragic and well spoken. grats on your win. well done ;)

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 6:00:00 AM

    congratulations on your first place win obviously pd has made a mistake in numbering her positions nobody would be rude to place top place as 2nd , well done

  1. Date: 4/16/2014 1:58:00 AM

    Hello Kelly, nice to see you on my winning list again. :)... Big hugs, and smiles... always & Forever ~LINDA

    A  Avatar Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/16/2014 2:00:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

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  1. Date: 4/16/2014 1:10:00 AM

    fantastic poem a well deserved winner. Hugs Jan x

    Deschler Avatar Kelly Deschler Date: 4/16/2014 2:36:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much, Jan. I do appreciate your kind comments. Hugs :)
  1. Date: 11/26/2013 10:17:00 PM

    Kelly Such a happy and sad poem all at the same time. This takes the reader on a journey with the butterfly from being born, living and dying. Nice job Thanks for the wonderful comment on my Door Mat poem. Your welcome for all the comments back.

  1. Date: 9/19/2013 4:10:00 AM

    Big congrats on your second place win Kelly that's a well deserved win!!!

  1. Date: 9/18/2013 2:21:00 PM

    Love your super win Kelly, ............ luv ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 9/17/2013 10:57:00 AM

    nicely written, the line of order in nature. Broken Wings is also a song by Mr. Mister, you can listen/ watch on utube ;}

  1. Date: 9/14/2013 1:57:00 PM

    nature can be so cruel congrats on win Shadow x smile

  1. Date: 9/14/2013 7:42:00 AM

    Congratulations on the win :) I felt the harsh suffering of the delicate butterfly...great last line

  1. Date: 9/13/2013 10:55:00 AM

    Congratulations on your winning place Kelly xx

  1. Date: 9/13/2013 8:50:00 AM

    Hi Kelly,, stopping by with hugs & smiles:-) xox (-: CONGRATULATIONS :) on your win. Enjoy my blog "You know where my heart is" when you have time. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=15906&PoetID=18720 ---Always & Forever xox-Linda-xox

  1. Date: 9/13/2013 8:36:00 AM

    Congrats on your poem winning in the contest, Kelly

  1. Date: 9/5/2013 6:04:00 PM

    You really painted grief and anxiety into this one. I can tell you put your heart into this one. It left me with a sickened feeling in my stomach.... Great writing, Poetess.... Jake

  1. Date: 9/1/2013 4:26:00 PM

    THAT FOR ME WAS AN EXCELLENT PIECE OF WRITING VERY DEEP YET BEAUTIFUL

  1. Date: 8/30/2013 3:06:00 PM

    Great write Kelly, life is so beautiful and yet so sad, you captured this in your poem,Life is all circles, and everything goes round and round, our consciousness. it's all symbolized in nature thanks for sharing your poem....Peter

  1. Date: 8/30/2013 9:08:00 AM

    I had the "Mister Mister" song, "Broken Wings", in my head the entire time I read this. It was so fitting for this absolutely painful, yet deeply emotional piece.

  1. Date: 8/30/2013 12:39:00 AM

    a reverse poem beautifully done, indeed very astute in details

  1. Date: 8/29/2013 6:43:00 PM

    I enjoyed your butterfly story dear lady, thank you for sharing xxx

  1. Date: 8/29/2013 6:08:00 PM

    Sent you a soupmail

  1. Date: 8/29/2013 6:07:00 PM

    Aha, a new poem! A great story told here, rather sad, but life seems to be like that. Again, I find that the descriptions, word choice, and word order are excellent. Seems like it has allegorical qualities as well.