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  1. Date: 10/23/2013 10:35:00 AM
    You seem to have the general concept down fine Becca. You have tried to use meter as well, there are inconsistencies in the meter, the 3rd verse flows the best. Your TURN/VOLTA is in line 9 NICE The content is charming. If you want to work more on it you have my regular email. download & try VersePerfect its FREE it helps tons. Light & Love

  1. Date: 9/26/2013 12:46:00 PM
    Soup mail Becca.

  1. Date: 9/13/2013 12:05:00 PM
    Beautifully crafted love poem!!! I can feel this deep in my heart.... I may have captured some of the same sentiment in "I Never Missed You More" found in my portfolio... Thanks for all your kind comments.... Love ya.... Jake

  1. Date: 8/31/2013 1:49:00 PM
    amazing opening line. DX

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 8:08:00 AM
    Nicely done. This is a good read

  1. Date: 8/26/2013 6:18:00 PM
    Shades of Shakespeare once again invade your writing, this is mystical.How can someone who writes with such sultryism not like the word sultry haha. Take care, Richard

  1. Date: 8/25/2013 11:39:00 AM
    This is very beautiful and tenderly written. Thanks for sharing.... Lucilla

  1. Date: 8/25/2013 11:31:00 AM
    The interplay between sun and moon and how you see your friend in a different time zone is lovely. It's romantic and sweet. You have something special here.

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 10:56:00 PM
    Very soothing!!! Beautifully written!!

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 6:12:00 PM
    Beautifully penned Becca . Love it!

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 5:13:00 PM
    Hi Becca, Most lovely romantic write with melodic flow.. Regards, Ken..

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 12:17:00 PM
    YES!! The power of the moon within such a lovely poem as this is surely tremendous my friend! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening write here this afternoon! What a brilliant and illustrious piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 11:20:00 AM
    Beautiful poetic language in this wonderfully written Sonnet, Becca! A delightful pleasure to read! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 10:51:00 AM
    Another beautifully expressed piece. The only real bump I experienced was with using "sultry"; while I see why you used it, it created a hiccup for me in the line. Personally, I would omit "sultry" just for the sake of flow, but I have great difficulty advising a fellow poet to change anything about their piece, as it makes me feel like a heel. Please forgive me for that. But it does not detract from the beauty and emotion of the piece. As I said, well done and well expressed. Kudos! :)

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 7:57:00 AM
    Riveting & gorgeous. "Moon", "Sun", metaphorical of your best yet.

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 7:25:00 AM
    A sweeping, majestic poem. What a beautiful thought that the moon carries warmth from absent loved ones to soothe our lonely nights.

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 6:59:00 AM
    STUNNING!!! One for the favs collection for sure! Good morning my dear Miss Becca... hope your weekend is fun and filled with love! Warm cuddly hugs and smiles from your good friend way up north! xoxox

  1. Date: 8/24/2013 4:44:00 AM
    beautiful.... :) A~D