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The Flame - Reverse

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The Flame - Reverse

our marriage is a dying flame
I will never believe
we can work things out again
the love is gone
please don’t say
we have to try again

I’m too tired to keep trying
and I could never say that
my love for you is still strong
you were the apple of my eye
but that feeling is gone 
I’ve felt so much pain

things will never be the same
we can’t keep thinking
that our love will last forever
I know
it’s over
we’re fools if we believe
we can turn this thing around 

**It's a reverse poem ... don't forget to read it in reverse, bottom to top :) 

 © Rebecca L ~ August, 2013 
*A fictional poem, written especially for Craig’s Reverse contest



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  1. Date: 8/30/2013 7:17:00 AM

    Becca, nice one.... congrats on your win... Cheers

  1. Date: 8/29/2013 11:24:00 PM

    becca, you made me swoon; beautiful!... sweet congrats on your top spot!..:) huggs

  1. Date: 8/29/2013 2:55:00 PM

    It's SO good, dear. Congratulations on your win!!

  1. Date: 8/29/2013 11:47:00 AM

    Perfect... Top to bottom and bottom to top...

  1. Date: 8/29/2013 10:52:00 AM

    Congrats on your great win..Sara

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 9:45:00 PM

    what a great piece. congrats on your big win. Well deserved. BG

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 7:52:00 PM

    This so deserved 1st place. Congrats Becca!

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 6:20:00 PM

    well done...congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 6:12:00 PM

    Congrats to you on your win. Morgan

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 4:07:00 PM

    congrats on a great win Becca

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 4:03:00 PM

    Becca I knew you'd be here among the top...congratulations

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 3:25:00 PM

    absolutely brilliant. love it. congrats on your win. well deserved. take care, Colleen

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 3:20:00 PM

    Wow Becca !!! Opposites in all directions !!! Congratulations on your big win in Craig's contest. hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 3:18:00 PM

    I knew this one would do well....it was amazing reading how the meaning changed depending on the direction it was read!! I wish I had thought of that..... Tricky to do, but so worthy of your win !!

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 2:33:00 PM

    Such a fine verse read in either direction!! I am in awe! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 1:44:00 PM

    This is sad Becca, but a very creative write, congrats on your win xxx

  1. Date: 8/27/2013 1:16:00 PM

    Thanks Becca!! What a PERFECT example of what talent can accomplish with a challenge!

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/27/2013 1:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wow!! Thank you, Craig!! Thank you for hosting this contest, I loved the challenge of writing a poem which could have a different meaning in reverse yet still make sense, it was really fun to write.
  1. Date: 8/24/2013 6:01:00 PM

    wow it means one thing one way and another thing the other way! GOOD WORK! Light & Love

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/25/2013 5:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Debbie!
  1. Date: 8/20/2013 4:37:00 AM

    I think you've done an excellent job in getting this poem to say something emotional and meaningful when read both ways - I wouldn't try one of these as it would drive me insane! lol and thanks for your lovely comment on my 'muse' poem :)

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/25/2013 5:00:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    hi Charlotte! Well it was a bit of a challenge but it was fun. Thanks for your visit and comment :)
  1. Date: 8/13/2013 8:41:00 AM

    This is heart-breaking, read either way, forward or backwards........I'm so sorry if this is from your heart and wish you all the best. Do take care of yourself. Best of luck in the contest....

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/13/2013 9:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    There are so many marriages in this situation, and those thoughts can be reversed! Love is a choice. :) thanks, Carrie
  1. Date: 8/13/2013 6:42:00 AM

    Wow! This was awesome! I believe this is the first time I have ever read a poem in reverse. I do hope your Marriage last. :-)

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/13/2013 7:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I know what you mean, this was new for me! It was fun and challenging to write. Thank you .. this is based on truth, down and up again :) Thank you for reading and commenting, hope you are doing well
  1. Date: 8/13/2013 5:44:00 AM

    great reverse poem Becca.....nicely done

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/13/2013 6:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Joseph! I'm waiting for yours ... ;)
  1. Date: 8/12/2013 3:52:00 PM

    Oh my gosh....Becca this is so awesome...mine stinks!!!!!!! Compared to this....fantastic job......yeah!

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/13/2013 6:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh Donna! I read yours and it doesn't stink at all but thank you for your compliments :)
  1. Date: 8/12/2013 10:58:00 AM

    Becca, you did an awesome job, I like the reverse so much better. If only we could reverse the less appealing parts of our lives, lol. Hugs

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/13/2013 6:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh you are so right, if only ... :) Well we can only try, but it's not always possible. Thanks you for your comment, Cecilia :) Big hugs
  1. Date: 8/12/2013 8:42:00 AM

    This is a good example of what happens when ones' attitude is either glass half-empty or half-full. Wonderfully done here.

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/12/2013 9:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You're so right. We make choices every day. And choosing to love is no exception, even in marriage. Thank you, Drake.
  1. Date: 8/12/2013 6:46:00 AM

    Of course Craig gave you a hard piece of meat to chew on..I mean its not an easy contest..You impressed me how you were able to write to different meanings in one poem.and how you did the poem in reverse..Definitely deserves a favourite and there it goes dear.

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/12/2013 9:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much Charmaine! :)
  1. Date: 8/11/2013 6:54:00 PM

    I gave it a try Becca.

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/12/2013 9:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    fantastic! :)
  1. Date: 8/11/2013 1:49:00 PM

    Very clever Becca, two poems in one with opposite meanings, Impressive write for sure. Mind you, just like a woman to keep changing her mind haha. Take care, Richard

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/11/2013 1:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ah haha ~ Richard! :) That's one of the best things about being a woman, we are allowed to change our minds, right? It's probably very charming too ~LOL (Impressive write? Thank you, that makes me smile much)
  1. Date: 8/11/2013 8:46:00 AM

    Hi Becca, it sure is nice to hear from you, thank you for dropping by! This sure is cleverly written and I like how you captured that "turn around" about the reverse poem-- reading it from top to bottom does give a sense of hopelessness, but yes bottom up turned this around wonderfully...I've always wanted to write a reverse poem ever since I read "Lost Generation"-- ever read that? But I have never pulled it off-- I think this will do well in Craig's contest! hugs & Welcome back to the Soup!

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/11/2013 9:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thank you Nikko, its good to be back. thanks for writing :) hugs
  1. Date: 8/11/2013 8:38:00 AM

    i read this from top to bottom to top and it really creates a continuous flow like an ensemble.. poignant piece , becca, and superb!..:) huggggs

    L. Avatar Rebecca L. Date: 8/11/2013 9:21:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wow thank you so much Nette!! It's an honor for me to hear that from you, miss poetess whom I admire much :D hugs
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