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Redemption Knight- For Medaeval Contest

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Redemption Knight- For Medaeval Contest

He rode the wind on mighty steed
He drove it fast to gain more speed
To win maiden in noble deed
As he galloped in the night…

He found his damsel in distress
With dragon claws clutching her dress
Disheveled hair and heart astress
As he galloped within sight…

One swift leap and he came aground
His rebel yell a mighty sound
Courage to fight in her he found
As he strode into her plight…

She gazed at eyes of azure blue
A depth of love she never knew
For handsome knight so brave and true
As she held on with her might…

He sunk he sword in to the hilt
Dragon heart blood to ground was spilt
Caught the damsel about to wilt 
As his valor set things right…

In his strong arms she found her place
She gazed into his angel face
Between their bodies not a space
As the night was tinged with light…

He bowed his head to plant a kiss
A song of love, no dragon hiss
Her world now filled with utter bliss
As to heaven they took flight….

For Isaiah Zerbest Medaeval contest
August 3, 2013

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  1. Date: 8/25/2013 2:31:00 PM
    Well done, Ellen. Congratulations on a well deserved win.... Jake

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Jake, thanks for the post. You haven't been around for a bit. Hope all is well.
  1. Date: 8/25/2013 3:04:00 AM
    Congrats on yr win. Morgan

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Morgan, thanks for taking the time to come back here and congratulate me. I appreciate it! :)
  1. Date: 8/24/2013 7:51:00 PM
    Awesome winning poem....SKAT

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Skat. I appreciate the post!
  1. Date: 8/23/2013 4:19:00 PM
    Eileen I am enchanted by your tale congrats on win Shadow x smile

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Enchanted...sweet! Thanks for that, Shadow.
  1. Date: 8/22/2013 12:47:00 PM
    Enjoyed reading again, congratulations, a well deserved win Eileen!

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Richard. Kind of you to come by and post this.
  1. Date: 8/22/2013 10:57:00 AM
    BRAVO! Each stanza was written sooo very well... and the story was marvelous..Your wording was exquisite... Congrats on such a great poem and win...

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:48:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    What a lovely, sweet, and lovely post, Carol! So glad that you enjoyed my poem and that you passed by! Hugs!
  1. Date: 8/21/2013 6:48:00 PM
    I am swooning with old maiden heart palpations after reading this one!! So fun to read.....and pleased to share placement with you !!! Congratulations!

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:49:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    An honor, indeed, to share the spot with you, Carrie. Thanks for the lovely visit. we all need a fairy tale now and again, don't we?
  1. Date: 8/21/2013 5:57:00 PM
    Awesome rhymes! And so very ideal! I am struck by the attention to detail in this piece as well. The dragon claws, the grand emotions, the "utter bliss"!

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Isaiah, I'm so grateful for the place you gave my poem in your contest. Thanks every so much for this kind post. I'm grateful!
  1. Date: 8/11/2013 7:42:00 PM
    All the best sister, this has all the formula, for a winner! Need i say more. . . ?

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for that, Danesh....Yes, more please!
  1. Date: 8/9/2013 9:46:00 AM
    love it ,,,, good luck in contest ;}

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/25/2013 2:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Late with this, but thanks for the wishes.... They worked! :)
  1. Date: 8/6/2013 9:07:00 PM
    You are an exceptional talent..your work is absolutely stunning...I love it...going in my faves:)

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/9/2013 3:36:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Stunning? Wow...What an invigorating adjective for me, Karen...i'm flying with your words of praise. Thank you!
  1. Date: 8/5/2013 4:47:00 AM
    Seems I've missed the debate over the last two stanzas so I can't comment on that. This though, tells the story well and flows freely. A good form for this tale. Good luck in the contest. Take care, Richard

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/5/2013 8:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    You know what they say about the cat being away.... ;) I"m glad you like the flow of the poem, Mr Seal....I'm not even sure if this form has a name, so I just put it in the rhyme category. I need the luck...I need it...Keep rooting for me!
  1. Date: 8/5/2013 12:17:00 AM
    love the passion,, i would never change a poem as good as this,, just write another similar then we can have two beautiful poems to cast one's eye upon..this is lovely///

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/5/2013 3:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Harry!!!!! Thanks ever so much for the post. Always great to hear from you. :) I'm smiling in real life too! :)
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 10:51:00 AM
    Hmm... edit the beginning part of line 17 and 18 then you decide on the last two stanzas.

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/4/2013 11:10:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I had a look, PJ...I'm not sure how? Care to give me some suggestions? Thanks!
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 7:51:00 AM
    This was coated in more of Eileen's fiery & passionate pen. I have this strong urge now to see Robin Hood: Men in Tights, the only good Robin Hood movie that matters. =D A very endearing end in this piece.

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/4/2013 11:11:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Oh Drake....I read the story of Robin Hood. No movie can do it justice, I'm sure...especially not Men in Tights! HA HA HA HA HA! Anyway...the part where he dies in Little John's arms after shooting the arrow had me sobbing for hours. My Mama thought I was losing it. Thank you for fiery and passionate...if I lose those qualities...I might as well stop writing. HUGS!
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 2:49:00 AM
    Your rhyming schematics was beautifully put together Eileen.This was well done.I love it.

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/4/2013 11:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    WOW! Thank you so much for this endearing post, Mustapha. I'm so pleased! :)
  1. Date: 8/3/2013 2:47:00 PM
    When you write those stanzas seperatly they are quite beautiful, They feel like a poem that can stand on their own. Perhaps it is the change in rhyme that threw me off.

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/4/2013 11:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Well, I certainly do NOT want to throw you off, Richard. You were right...This way I got two poems out of one! Good deal. Always be on hand to guide me! Hugs!
  1. Date: 8/3/2013 1:46:00 PM
    This is good, not exactly sure what changed but this feels better. Well done Eileen.

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/3/2013 1:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    He dressed her in virgin white To bedchamber did invite Candles set to glowing light For her passion to ignite As she gave in to her knight He took her to wondrous height The night shimmered with delight Heaven burst upon her sight I deleted these two stanzas in the end....
    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/3/2013 1:48:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Oh Richard....I took out those last two stanzas...those that I had in mono rhyme.......
  1. Date: 8/3/2013 1:41:00 PM
    great wordsmith you are, eileen... is there a sequeal to this one... romance and valor at theor best!..:) huggs

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/3/2013 1:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hi Nette...I did have two more stanzas to it, but....I deleted them. Glad you liked this! Hugs!
  1. Date: 8/3/2013 12:31:00 PM
    ... as a romantic adventure story Eileen, I love it! - Wish you and your family a beautiful weekend.- Luck in contest !!!! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 8/3/2013 1:43:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Anne Lise....thanks you so much for your visit and sweet words! Hugs!
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