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Too Much Slag

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Too Much Slag

At crushing depths 
Titanic rests 
Rusticles- like red ice 
hang from her corpse 
[the excrement of 
fathoms deep bacteria] 
And now technology
[ undreamed of when it was needed] 
peers at her 
[long submerged wreckage] 
from slick sub-like vessels 
taking computer generated 
photo mosaics 
for investigators to pore over 
Once mystifying questions 
are un-layered one by one 
from evidence locked 
within her tortured skeleton,
revealing
[ not the simple impact of 
an iceberg sealed her fate 
but rather]
 a 'series of happenings', 
without remedy 
Rivets of, 'too much slag' 
gave way 
letting in Atlantic's weight 
Her belly full, 
she hugged her center keel 
[in futile efforts] 
to keep bow and stern connected 
As she sank, into eternity, 
chambered cells, 
[once meant to prevent 
the onslaught of the sea,] 
were breached so easily? 
Sea weight tore her 
great- ship's-soul asunder 
And sinking to the sea's dark floor 
she took with her,
poor forsaken passengers 
[crying in disbelief 
at that cruel and lying 'myth'] 
See sawing down, 
the broken stern end 
speared, into fathoms deep mud, 
the  bow rails kept, intact 
[for all the ghosts 
to lean on ]
And with the solving of 
her final hours, 
it is unthinkable, 
that this rusticled spectre 
{once so full of mystery] 
had been thought to be 
'unsinkable' 

Suzanne Delaney 

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  1. Date: 8/8/2014 12:16:00 PM
    Rusticles--- I love that! It's so perfect and evokes the image of the the decaying ship so perfectly.

  1. Date: 8/5/2013 5:57:00 AM
    A stunning piece which really deserved its super win! CONGRATULATIONS my dear friend and sista Suz! And since somebody sent me a message, i'm passing it to you, Happy Friendship Day! Big sweet hugs! love lots, Leonora

  1. Date: 8/5/2013 5:02:00 AM
    SuZ., congrats on your well deserved victory. G.

  1. Date: 8/5/2013 2:42:00 AM
    I was sucked in from the very first line...'As she sank, into eternity'...WOW...What I find most sad about the Titanic is all those lives were lost because of foolish arrogance...Congrats my friend - Tim

  1. Date: 8/4/2013 10:05:00 PM
    Suz, Congratulations, with your winning poem..... goodnight~ Linda

  1. Date: 8/4/2013 5:17:00 PM
    Technology in its own infancy, ignorance, wealth, power, haste, and that massive iceberg. All contributing factors to the demise of the RMS Titanic. A sad day in history. Well-written!...Milt

  1. Date: 8/4/2013 5:06:00 PM
    An awesome win SUz..... SKAT

  1. Date: 8/4/2013 12:48:00 PM
    A billionaire is going to build an exact replica of this unsinkable ship .....well penned Suz.....congrats on your win

  1. Date: 8/2/2013 7:48:00 AM
    wow, I LOVE this one!!! YOu are at top form with this free verse of yours,my friend. There is a small book for level three students at my school about these crazy "Happenings" that brought down this great ship and I was reminded of that reader as I read this. GREAT job with this descriptive writing.

    Delaney Avatar Suzanne Delaney
    Date: 8/4/2013 12:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Andrea: I saw a documentary that triggered this poem. There is a story in our family that my Grandmother missed her train that was to connect her to sail on the Titanic. I may not have been born had she caught it. Strange how Fate works.