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The Great Swan

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The Great Swan

"Who's woods are these anyway' .

Who's woods that I  dwell .

The house of Usher I know so well.

I seek to skate on the frozen lake.

These's woods are deep, dark, weak.

Though I would dance like a swan if I could.

The lake is always frozen this time of year.

How I love the night woods that covet me.

Under the bulging night skies of death.

Beyond the place of wrath and tears.

I would dance upon the lake till not.

Alluring ,always caressing in gentle touch.

I would be remembered as " The Great Swan".

Though here I sit in my bed chamber of death.
And wait for God to call my name.  



1pm wed.  7 / 24 / 2013,,,,,  " house of Usher" stands for death,,, " right"   the woods are a metaphor for the sick body .

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  1. Date: 6/20/2014 5:16:00 AM
    This is a true gem. Writes such as this fascinate me and I can see , "eyes peering into eternity in them" This one goes into my favorites. Thanks!!!

  1. Date: 9/4/2013 10:06:00 AM
    A facinating piece... Very deep and aluring to read over and over...

  1. Date: 8/19/2013 6:02:00 PM
    deep as, subtle as the water, under the lake of frozen time, ask not what is that ding, don't listen to that ring, hear the bloody Angels sing? bell a tinkle, is it mine? sorta.... its fine... plonk or wine? benzadrine just aint my thing, talk to you another time. Don re: "The Great Swan" Debbie Duncan

  1. Date: 8/16/2013 8:53:00 AM
    Though my pain is not visible, and my body seems not to weaken, inside I sit within my own death, struggling to move, to dance like the great swan who I could only hope to meet...Sickness comes in many forms and holds each back from their dreams...But, you cant stop dreaming, no matter what.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/16/2013 5:10:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I think I like your words better then mine ;} thanks for reading Jay ;}
  1. Date: 8/15/2013 2:39:00 PM
    You must really like swans. I remember this one you wrote and also you told me at my poem today that you liked best the swan ride on the merry go round. I wanted to mention the unicorn in my poem but couldn't work it in!

  1. Date: 8/6/2013 10:19:00 PM
    Gorgeous write. I am at awe of your words. These lines are quite memorable and I like that you referenced a bit of Poe to add to the deathiness and sickliness of the poem. Beautiful.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/7/2013 3:36:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thank you Laura ;}
  1. Date: 8/6/2013 6:24:00 PM
    Also your avatar is a little dark on the bottom half. Makes me think of the top half a little like a swan on the water. You definitely have the grace and elegance of one! Keep on dancing!

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/7/2013 3:40:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks for reading Duke ;}
  1. Date: 8/6/2013 10:19:00 AM
    awesome poetry, Debbie, so deep and visual,,,

  1. Date: 8/6/2013 2:00:00 AM
    Excellent poem, great use of the metaphors, I pray this is just a poem and you are well, this is a well written reflection of dreams of one living in the house of usher, have a great day, blessings sueellen

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/7/2013 3:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Sue- Ellen ;}
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 7:13:00 PM
    Enjoyed reading again, on second read I am moving to my favorites. Thanks for your thoughtful visit. Also rating a 7.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/5/2013 4:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Richard ;}
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 5:42:00 PM
    As Terry said "eerily wonderful"! I second her motion! Thanks for checking my "Wacko Jacko"! LOL Hugs, Jack xoxox

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison
    Date: 8/4/2013 5:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    "HIS" motion! LOL
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 5:18:00 AM
    This is impressive Debbie.Really well done.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/4/2013 5:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I thank you ;}
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 3:14:00 AM
    Eerily wonderful... Terry

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/4/2013 5:39:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Terry ;}
  1. Date: 8/4/2013 12:51:00 AM
    gosh,I am reading this again and noticing the footnotes this time. Were they there the first time I read it? Sorry if I missed that the first time!! great allegory.

  1. Date: 8/3/2013 7:23:00 PM
    Debbie, you have such a range of emotion in all your work. You must be a very empathetic person. Some of us have a big antenna. That is a very good thing. It is a pleasure to see this. Thank-you for all of your comments. You are fresh, honest and kind!

  1. Date: 8/3/2013 2:25:00 PM
    Hi Debbie this is just brill, i enjoyed the whole thing gripped from start to end, this is why I love to be on the soup, all the best Poetowen

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/3/2013 3:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you owen ;}
  1. Date: 8/2/2013 4:51:00 PM
    Strong verse. My first poem of yours. I am impressed. G.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/3/2013 2:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for reading and liking ;}
  1. Date: 8/2/2013 7:28:00 AM
    I would remove the explanation, the poem speaks on it's own. Beautiful imagery.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/4/2013 5:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank Richard ;}
  1. Date: 7/30/2013 11:15:00 AM
    sublime and wel expressed; you made me hold my breath, deb... fine, fine write!..:) huggs

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/30/2013 7:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you nette ;}
  1. Date: 7/30/2013 6:20:00 AM
    Debbie, it was the references to dancing that inspired me. The dreams we have and the path we take through life both lead to our demise--sadly. You, I hope will have happy days!

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/30/2013 6:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Ok, now I get it ;}
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