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Cotton Candy On A Windy Day

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Cotton Candy On A Windy Day

You explain your thoughts away.
Like cotton candy on a windy day
As your adventures never seem to end.
Talk of riding roller coasters straight to 
heaven and then back again.

You say your're an angel incarnate disguise.
Though you never say how you know this.
Your're always wanting to sit by the sea.
You say, it's to wait for your lover , And 
Your're most definitely sure it's not me.


You take me on rides I've never been before.
I know I could get off your merry go round.
If I so choose to, not sure that I want to.
You show me so many possibilities of me.
Your world seems brighter and clearer.

Though I watch you slit your wrist.
As you let the blood run free.
And I do nothing to stop you.
Only because you want to be set free. 

 
Fri. 11pm  7/ 19/ 2013

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  1. Date: 1/29/2014 7:28:00 PM
    I guess he did ride to heaven...very sad ending...

  1. Date: 8/15/2013 7:20:00 PM
    first she gets high on the roller coaster then goes south as a lover. cotton your candy truly is the tumble weed of the fair. you don't know where its been and don't know where it's going.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/15/2013 9:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for reading Karl ;}
  1. Date: 8/13/2013 10:33:00 PM
    hi deary sweety Debbie.. so very nice to ready your beautiful poem... :)

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/15/2013 9:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hi Sukmawa ;}
  1. Date: 8/7/2013 12:32:00 AM
    Hi Debbie great words here, often wonder how much couage it actually takes to end your own life, don't think I have that much, all the best Poetowwen

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/7/2013 12:57:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Owen ;}
  1. Date: 8/6/2013 10:15:00 PM
    Wow-- amazing work here. I cannot even began to comprehend it fully. But your words hit familiar spots in my heart. Beautiful work. Always, Laura

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/7/2013 12:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you so much Laura ;}
  1. Date: 8/6/2013 5:04:00 PM
    Yep i worked as a wardsman at a hospital..saw an Aboriginal lady on the footpath, blood dripping from her slashed wrists, as i went home after 11pm finish of my shift... So i took her to another hospital and the nurses accused me of not looking after my girlfriend properly??? qualudes again ...

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/6/2013 5:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    does that mean you liked my write ;}
  1. Date: 8/3/2013 11:50:00 AM
    Very surprising....I thought it was to be about clouds. Excellent and suspenseful finish. SuZ

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/3/2013 3:20:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you SuZ ;}
  1. Date: 8/2/2013 4:53:00 PM
    Your allegories magnetize. This the second poem of yours that I read. Well done! G.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 8/2/2013 5:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I thank you for your nice comment ;}
  1. Date: 7/29/2013 7:50:00 AM
    Didn't call 911 or apply pressure?..Great expressive and emotive work..Thanks for the visit to my work..Yes, the more I know about what is in food the less I want to eat boxed and ready made..Jello is made from something that comes out of animal bones maybe when it is cooked..I know when I boil a chicken there is part that will congeal and well as when I bake a ham,etc..That is what is used but I am sure it comes from the cheapest source that the manufacturer can get..I just had cereal well.Sara

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/30/2013 8:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for coming by Sara ;}
  1. Date: 7/28/2013 6:19:00 PM
    Not sure what to make of this. Sometimes, the signs are not so obvious. The dark side of things is always interesting.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/29/2013 3:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks for reading Duke ;}
  1. Date: 7/27/2013 5:06:00 PM
    I love the cotton candy simile! And I agree with the comment below, the ending was a good twist! Well done, Debbie. Another wonderful poem from you :)

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/27/2013 6:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Anne ;}
  1. Date: 7/26/2013 7:38:00 PM
    Hi Debbie....What a shocker didnt expect the ending,,, love how you convey your thoughts great poem,,,, really enjoyed reading thankyou!!! Cherie....

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/26/2013 10:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Cherie ;}
  1. Date: 7/26/2013 1:40:00 PM
    Took me right along to familiar places....loved it Debbie....

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/26/2013 3:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Donna ;}
  1. Date: 7/24/2013 9:06:00 PM
    Oh my, what a dark turn this took. Beautifully written piece though. Very nice.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/24/2013 11:05:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you April ;}
  1. Date: 7/23/2013 11:20:00 PM
    Hi Deb, wow..i thought it was gonna be about cotton candy.. and a breeze... this is a twist... what inspired such a poem... wow... love it...LINDA

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/23/2013 11:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Linda ;}
  1. Date: 7/23/2013 7:42:00 AM
    gosh, that was an unexpected ending for me. How sad because a person like this sounds so marvelous the way you have characterized him..

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/23/2013 11:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I thought some would reply about that ending ;}
  1. Date: 7/23/2013 7:42:00 AM
    An ominous & intense roller coaster. I did not expect that kind of ending. Damn, excellent job!

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/23/2013 11:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Drake ;}
  1. Date: 7/23/2013 7:41:00 AM
    debbie , I love your alternate ending on the Roses are red poem. now to see your poem here.

    Duncan Avatar Debbie Duncan
    Date: 7/23/2013 11:19:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I thought you might ;}