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  1. Date: 7/12/2013 10:20:00 AM

    Natasha, this was very well written. Though, I'm wondering if this would be more fitting as a Senryu? No matter. The setting was inviting and the atmosphere layered in solitude w/a touch of sadness...yet, there's a need for security & peace. Something, it seems, not everybody can appreciate, nor understand...nice work! Don't stop! :)

  1. Date: 7/12/2013 12:25:00 AM

    I have always hated Haiku and this is no exception. It is not a haiku just because it has three lines. You need to read real ones and realise that the first two lines are metaphoric and the last line suggest the meaning.

    Wright Avatar Natasha Wright Date: 7/13/2013 1:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    i also suggest u read some haikus n note that they are about finding something more in the simple things n not always metophoric.
    Wright Avatar Natasha Wright Date: 7/12/2013 12:34:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    This is metaphorical. Perhaps you need to open your mind a bit more when you read it. I am here for feedback good and bad, however I appreciate constructive criticism, not bitter insults. I HAVE read many Haiku poems and I believe you should reserve your opinion unless it is of some use. This is not what this site is for.