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Dancing on a point

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Below is the poem entitled Dancing on a point which was written by poet Richard Lamoureux. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Dancing on a point

Dancing on the point of a needle again
Trying to forget her pain
Liquide dreams flowing through her veins
Painting pretty pictures on her brain

Trying to forget her pain
As she sways to music only she can hear
Painting pretty pictures on her brain
Her little prick of happy turns to fear

As she sways to music only she can hear
It changes to a somber note
Her little prick of happy turns to fear
She feels dark fingers around her throat

It changes to a somber note
This is now a fight for her life
She Feels dark fingers around her throat
She reaches for an imaginary knife

This is now a fight for her life
No longer knowing what is real
She reaches for an imaginary knife
An empty space is all she can feel

No longer knowing what is real
From the edge she finally steps back
An empty space is all she can feel
Her mind no longer under attack

From the edge she finally steps back
She returns to her sad reality
Her mind no longer under attack
Yet she is still in need of being set free

She returns to her sad reality
Liquide dreams flowing through her veins
Yet she is still in need of being set free
Dancing on the point of a needle again

Inspired by Cherie Thomas
Read her poem "A piece of Foil"

Modified Pantoum incorporating Rhyme

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  1. Date: 7/7/2013 3:39:00 AM
    I agreed with Andrea about your poem being deep and dark. I sure read Cherie's before stopping by your fine work. Well done Richard on your decent Modified Pantoum. AO

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/7/2013 6:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hi A.O, so nice to have you visit. I hope you are well.
  1. Date: 7/7/2013 2:11:00 AM
    Good night, Richard...sweet dreams. Thanks for the post. I appreciate it. Hoping to read something new from you, or I'll have to resort to reading the old work again. Always a pleasure either way. Take care.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/7/2013 6:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Sorry I didn't have a chance to drop by sooner. Late day at work and we had a pre wedding fundraiser to attend.
  1. Date: 7/7/2013 12:17:00 AM
    PD cant go.:( I was hoping.But understand.Take care of her while I am gone please.She has been through alot.No slacking while I am gone cause my sister has a computer I will be checking.Love Colleen

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/7/2013 6:53:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hopefully you can connect at another time, either way I hope you fully enjoy your trip.
  1. Date: 7/6/2013 7:26:00 PM
    working on saturday,shame on you and you didnt ask me first.See now your behind on writing.Thanks for your visits.Love Colleen

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/6/2013 11:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Your most welcome Colleen, just four more days till your trip.
  1. Date: 7/6/2013 7:21:00 AM
    Good morning, Richard. Addiction has many different forms. Many of us are addicted to one thing or another... great inspirational write. Have a good day.....

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/6/2013 7:29:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Eileen;0)
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 10:21:00 PM
    Richard, a moving poem expressing deep struggle. Sometimes solitary life gets really intense... Exceptional :)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/6/2013 6:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks so much Karen.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 10:15:00 PM
    WOW, you are very talented. I think I told you that before!! Is it for Deb's Referential contest. Mine is going to be dark like this one too. Love this.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/6/2013 6:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    No not for the contest, I think Debs is free form otherwise I might have entered it.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 3:53:00 PM
    Wow, You certainly tell it as it is, and yet so unique this rendering of sadness, you truly are a special guy Richard, i feel privilege reading what you write.. just sorry i'm not around as much now a days....

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/6/2013 6:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Your comments are so touching Harry, you just made my day.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 12:21:00 PM
    Richard this write blew me away sensational Shadow x smiles

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/6/2013 6:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks you are sweet Shadow.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 10:33:00 AM
    Nice as usual.I dont know how you do it.I cant keep up with comments let alone writes everyday.Colleen

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/6/2013 6:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Sometimes it is hard to keep up.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 8:34:00 AM
    a great breakaway from the dance of pain.. you amaze, richard... brilliantly created by your gold pen!..:) huggs

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/5/2013 8:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Nette, you always have such a nice flare with your comments.
    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/5/2013 8:37:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Drake. Often the places we humans seek our freedom leads us to torture chambers constructed in the bowels of unimaginable pain. We reach for imaginary bliss and are swallowed up in the process.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 8:24:00 AM
    Mmm, the power of freedom. The power of even reaching that peak in the 1st place. Fantastic lines, Richard!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes
    Date: 7/7/2013 7:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    So well said...so very true.
    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/5/2013 8:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    See comment above
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 8:13:00 AM
    Dancing with an addiction is not a pretty sight..Great expressive work telling the story.Enjoyed reading this morn..If not for the footnotes I would have thought of someone who had a mental illness..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/5/2013 8:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks for commenting, Sara.
  1. Date: 7/5/2013 7:06:00 AM
    Wow!!! What a powerful gripping write, Richard i love the title, gave me chills reading it!!! sheer emotional distress screams, against that turmoil of addiction...a honest look at what so many battle with, on a daily basis. Brillant write!!!You captured this so well, dancing on a point!!! I love it...thankyou so much for sharing this amazing poem & the dedication,,,,, truly appreciate it very much....onelove:0) Cheriex

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/5/2013 8:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    This comment makes my day, your poem brought out emotions in me because I grew up in a home with addiction. Fortunately my mom was a stabilizing force within the madness created by my father.