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Visiting Hours Over

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Visiting Hours Over

Just sitting, I'm  knitting,  dreaming as fan blades idle
slowly with an incoming wind.  The hands circle the clock
marking the passage of time into soundless history.

It is late, almost eight, a nurse appears at the door -
"Time to leave pretty soon." My hands cradle his face
as I kiss the salty brow of his altered memory.

Tears flowing, I'm going; our eyes meet and we soul mates
sing a hymn together.  The dream is understood
by musician and poet.  Rhythm has struck the right keys.

What's more, in close rapport,  his lips form - a mute "Bye, Bye."
With a rare smile, he leaves me.  I watch the fan blades reverse.
His dream come true - escorted  by a faint, outgoing breeze.


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  1. Date: 7/7/2013 12:54:00 AM

    Reason, it is such a nice piece of work, i like it !! Jag

    Poteet Avatar Reason A. Poteet Date: 7/11/2013 2:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Appreciate the support, my friend. Thanks for taking the time to comment.
  1. Date: 7/3/2013 5:17:00 PM

    really enjoyed this TFS well expressed Shadow x smiles

    Poteet Avatar Reason A. Poteet Date: 7/11/2013 2:06:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    TFS usually means you don't want to hear any more, but I'll take it as just Thanks For Sharing. It was fictional based on real life.
  1. Date: 6/28/2013 7:47:00 PM

    Reason, this is really a great poem that you penned. One of your best!

    Poteet Avatar Reason A. Poteet Date: 6/29/2013 6:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Andrea, your comments mean a lot to this budding poet.
  1. Date: 6/27/2013 11:31:00 PM

    Nice write. For correct grammar purposes, just change "slow" at the start of your second line to "slowly". You need an adverb there in lieu of an adjective.

    Poteet Avatar Reason A. Poteet Date: 6/29/2013 1:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Robert for your careful reading. I've edited the piece somewhat and changed the verb to idle (from turn) which demands the adverb, slowly. Some dictionaries do label "slow" as adverb as well as adjective. http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/slow http://www.thefreedictionary.com/slow I believe you have helped me improve the piece and I appreciate your help.
  1. Date: 6/27/2013 10:35:00 PM

    I really like this. Great job!

    Poteet Avatar Reason A. Poteet Date: 6/29/2013 6:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you April. Glad you took time to read my piece.