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What I See Outside

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What I See Outside

I see the sun
spilling, over the trees
and the flags waving at me
I see the train
Speeding past me
And the cars running along as if,
They were in a marathon
I se the train tracks glistening in
the setting colors of the sun
I see pink, orange, yellow, and purple colors
In the sky, smiling at me
What I see outside is...
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  1. Date: 6/23/2013 10:10:00 PM

    Jenisy, your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan and "FRIEND"....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT

  1. Date: 6/22/2013 10:40:00 PM

    Enjoyable poem which I would consider 'Free Verse', because it does not contain rhyme nor meter and yet still contains the elements of a well written poem. Great use of imagery, which provides the reader with the sense that they embody the experiences of the main character while reading the poem. I would just fix the spelling of 'see' on the eighth line and keeping writing more works, because you have real talent.

  1. Date: 6/22/2013 12:25:00 PM

    hope you find what you are seeking for ... LUV~ LINDA

  1. Date: 6/22/2013 12:25:00 PM

    Jenisy, , "Welcome to the poetry soup. I'm stopping by to invite you on over to my latest contest -- I'm hoping you will consider the enjoyment and challenges we offer on this site. Please consider my contest. You can find the contest page on the top left hand side. I’m looking forward in reading and enjoying your poems in the future.Hoping to become a follower and a friend to your poems, and persona. Thanks @-> LINDA <-@"