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PAST OF HORROR

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Below is the poem entitled PAST OF HORROR which was written by poet Denise Hopkins. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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PAST OF HORROR

written 3rd november 2001


I wake up with another tear
for I have again relived the nightmare
will it ever leave
when will I again be able to see
the past is forgiven
so why is it still living
my heart was broken
but soon after it was frozen
let it lye and the past die
for I have a life to give
but the past is still being relived
how do I stop this past of tourcher
so I can find my future

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  1. Date: 6/20/2013 8:21:00 PM
    Hey Denise, you made two spelling errors in this work, this won't impress your peers, you must proof read your work as your presentation will suffer many bad comments, poets are picky at times and can dish out plenty of critisism, so please be careful before posting. Try not to end with a question as it leaves people up in the air at the end, finish with a punch line, a surprise, it works for me. John

    Ginesi Avatar John Ginesi
    Date: 6/20/2013 8:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I forgot to comment on your poem itself, it is quite inspirational and you do have to let go of your past or you can never move on with your life.
  1. Date: 6/8/2013 8:06:00 AM
    A lot of heart in this little poem and one can sense what you are feeling. You have some rhyming lines and one good internal rhyme, but this one has the feel of free verse. Good job! Kim